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Love Angel
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since 2003-11-04
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0 posted 2004-05-24 05:55 PM


Remeber those days when,
We'd stay up til 2 a.m.
Just planning our future,
And how we'd be togehter.
And you were my hero,
And I just want you to know,
Never felt like this before,
Problem solved you were my answer.

Come with me,
I wanna show you all of me.
Let me be,
The part of you that's not complete.

The water was so clear,
Wished we would never leave there,
So open spilled my heart,
Your shoulder when I fell apart.
Those nights we'd watch the star,
And me there in your amrs and,
That's where I felt at home,
I know that you are the one.

Come with me,
I wanna show you all of me.
Let me be,
The part of you that's not complete.

I cannot control the way I feel inside,
And trusting me i gonna take a long, long time.
Not long ago I told you I would die for you,
And that's no lie.

So come with me,
I wanna show you all of me.
Let me be,
The part of you that's not complete.

© Copyright 2004 Love Angel - All Rights Reserved
ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2004-05-24 07:56 PM


I love this! Sorry have no critique or anything particularly interesting to say, but I really like this  
~Liz.


"Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake

ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2004-05-24 07:57 PM


Sorry, I forgot to tick the library box and I tried to do it through editing my reply but it didn't work...

"Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake

marcel
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since 2003-03-02
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az, usa
3 posted 2004-05-24 08:16 PM


lovely and honest!
chinesestone
Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 76
China
4 posted 2004-05-24 08:20 PM


wonderfull poetry

i like it the deep feeling

pictureme
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since 2003-11-28
Posts 248
Ohio, USA
5 posted 2004-05-24 11:28 PM


this could be a song! A wedding would be
a wonderful place for these words!
nicely done, I could hear the music!
pictureme :-)

TerryW
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since 2000-03-23
Posts 779
Louisville, Mississippi, USA
6 posted 2004-05-25 12:35 PM


Very Lovely!  Full of heartfelt truth.  
Thanks for sharing!

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2004-05-26 12:26 PM


NIce...James
Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
8 posted 2004-05-26 12:43 PM


very expressive and loving -- enjoyed.

Smiles -- Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Love Angel
Junior Member
since 2003-11-04
Posts 25

9 posted 2004-05-29 05:30 PM


I want to thank you for all your replys and apologize because I haven't replied sooner.  My new born has been in the hospital and I have had a lot on my mind.  Once again, thank you.  This is actually my wedding song because I am getting married in 2 weeks and I wanted to see what other people thought of it because I wrote it for my fiance.

LA

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