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Kazm
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0 posted 2004-05-24 05:43 PM



Tock
Tock
Tock
You left me with half the clock
No energetic Tick, only the
Tock
Tock
Tock
That's the instant when it stops
Hoping for another second
Tock
Tock
Tock

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Kethry
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1 posted 2004-05-24 05:45 PM


Very neatly written, I could almost see the clock struggling to complete its circuit.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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2 posted 2004-05-25 09:30 AM


I know this halflife that you've written so beautifully... and that desperate hope. *S* Wonderful work... and it's so good to see you posting again!!! *S*
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2004-05-25 09:32 AM


Kazm
Cute, enjoyed.

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4 posted 2004-05-25 04:01 PM


Oops, almost missed a Kaz.... Now I'll have to go looking for more. Well done sir!

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