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James_A_Fraser
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Out Making Anticlines

0 posted 2004-05-24 02:30 PM


Yes


you don't
ask

would
never
ask

but your
eyes, your
eyes

and I must
answer them
somehow

somehow

I
offer
them the
only word
I own

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2004-05-24 02:32 PM



Separated, disjointed thoughts,
leaving room enough for the reader
to intersperse a little dialogue
of one's own.  The way it should be.
Yes.

Susan
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walking the surreal
2 posted 2004-05-24 02:35 PM


but your
eyes, your
eyes

and I must
answer them
somehow

Very nice.  I really like this part

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

TerryW
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3 posted 2004-05-24 03:21 PM


Beautifully done!  Gets the imagination flowing!

~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

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4 posted 2004-05-24 03:27 PM


Jaime~
The title said all I needed to hear~

So little (?) ... SO MUCH !~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

iliana
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5 posted 2004-05-24 05:39 PM


Enjoyed the flow of this and its simplity, yet the depth!   ....jo
JamesMichael
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6 posted 2004-05-25 12:58 PM


Nice...James
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7 posted 2004-05-25 09:42 AM


This touches the very heart of me. *S* I especially love the ending... for giving all you can is giving everything... whatever the question. *S*

Absolutely beautiful work, my friend! *S*

Pilgrimage
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8 posted 2004-05-25 05:22 PM


You're a master at this.  Well done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

passing shadows
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displaced
9 posted 2004-05-26 03:25 AM


I can't say no either
Martie
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10 posted 2004-05-29 10:14 PM


Jamie

Eyes speak another language sometimes....and I think one of the words they know best is a deeper yes.

dingusjr
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11 posted 2004-06-01 05:25 PM


You don't ask
would never ask.......too bad.
Good stuff, Jamie.

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12 posted 2004-06-01 05:45 PM


OH WOW!!!!  I love this!!!!!!!
Big hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

suthern
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13 posted 2004-06-02 10:49 AM


I'm so glad this came back to the top... once again it touches my heart. *S*
LeeJ
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14 posted 2004-06-02 11:18 AM


eyes can sometimes open up an entire new world, with a new culture, yet to explore.
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just out of reach
15 posted 2004-06-02 01:52 PM


KEEPIN' THIS !!!!! Wonderful. hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

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