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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2004-05-23 03:54 PM



the carpet stains
the walls within
the people around
me but I feel I
don't fit in.


Same as they may be
more they won't
understand i feel
different around them

but you I feel as if
I knew you forever
once in a place of
horrid pain and misery
I share the most personal
things with you before
I've ever known you were
alive.

the time scapes through
our window sills as I count
the days that I'll be with you
the man in the black coat
shakes it off with his hands
I beg of him to give me another
chance.

the love Ive found is scary as
it may seem I won't let it go
no matter what you mean everything
to me.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


© Copyright 2004 Julie O'Neill - All Rights Reserved
Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
1 posted 2004-05-23 04:15 PM


I can hear the emotions spoken by your heart.  I'm glad you found an "in".

Best to you,
Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
2 posted 2004-05-23 04:17 PM


thanks.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2004-05-23 05:23 PM


yep...it really is scary sometimes, isn't it?
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-05-23 05:28 PM


Very well said...and much enjoyed the read.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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USA
5 posted 2004-05-23 05:56 PM


Thanks for penning such deep emotions; love is really frightening if you have been hurt before.  
Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
6 posted 2004-05-23 06:18 PM


thanks,im glad you guys liked it. I gave the poem I written here*True Compassion* to the guy who inspired me to write it. he loved it and got all choked up and said that was the nicest thing anyone has ever said to him before.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


rosepetals25
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7 posted 2004-05-26 03:29 PM



I really liked this

Tara

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
8 posted 2004-05-26 03:48 PM


i felt this so deeply...excellent
write, love is a beautiful thing!
take care,
amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla
9 posted 2004-05-26 10:47 PM


thanks guys *HUGS*
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