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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2004-05-21 03:28 PM



My eyes swim
In the water of lost hope
My skin no longer feels
Warmth from your hand

Just falseness

I hear their voices
Telling me
I look to you
Not understanding

Why?

I let you know
My fears
You didn’t give me the choice
To choose for myself

I know the truth
I feel it in the lack

I want my solitude back

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

© Copyright 2004 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-05-21 03:31 PM


want your solitude back?

ah... solitude is not all it is cracked up to be.. but I'll tiptoe quietly away..and leave you to your musings...


nicely done ma'am

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2 posted 2004-05-21 03:32 PM


Last line really really grabbed me, and the tone of this hurts...but you still maintain grace
Sadelite
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3 posted 2004-05-21 04:06 PM


Your writings always touch...  Feel better.
          Sadie

inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2004-05-21 04:18 PM


I let you know
My fears
You didn’t give me the choice
To choose for myself

i read your comment and yes , we are in sync today!
the fears you are brave enough to show; only to have them turned against you for being human, o yes, my poet sister, i know, i know

but we do rise above

JL
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5 posted 2004-05-21 04:24 PM


"I know the truth
I feel it in the lack

I want my solitude back"

Me too.  Enjoyed this write.
JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


Enchantress
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6 posted 2004-05-21 04:53 PM


"I let you know
My fears
You didn’t give me the choice
To choose for myself

I know the truth
I feel it in the lack

I want my solitude back"

I know this feeling...yes....well said Susan!
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

garysgirl
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7 posted 2004-05-22 01:48 AM


Susan, if you're like me, you
let them know too much sometimes.....

Edder
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8 posted 2004-05-22 10:29 AM


and that's why we build these walls... isn't it? (((hugs)))
icebox
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9 posted 2004-05-22 10:41 AM


Very well done!

...but it made me want to grab you and yell at you to not come down this road; I have lived on it for too long to move and you are young and have the rest of the world.

...of course, maybe it is just a guy territorial thing.

Maybe I just need coffee.

*smile*

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10 posted 2004-05-22 03:09 PM


I understand
serenity blaze
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11 posted 2004-05-22 05:51 PM


smile...

Hello, my lovely buddy, and yes, in solitude, you don't have to trust...

(I have issues)

grin

love ya lady

this was a painful read for me, but artfully written

Magnus
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12 posted 2004-05-22 10:44 PM


Susan,  may you find the lee of the shore
and hear the gentle lapping of waves beneath
a night sky filled with Heaven's light and
again be who you wish.  

Always,

Barry

Susan Caldwell
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13 posted 2004-05-24 08:10 AM




Thank you for the wonderful replies!

Icy?  Nah, it was just a thing....that day.  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Brad Majors
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14 posted 2004-05-24 12:21 PM


Every piece of your's just amazes me. I am definately a huge fan.
iliana
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15 posted 2004-05-24 05:46 PM


Susan -- Know what you mean, whether it is significant other or children or whatever -- I didn't have choices for so long and now that I have them, I fight tooth and nail to keep them -- especially, when it comes to having solitude.  But then again, I appreciate the fact I'm not alone (if that makes any sense???)!  Enjoyed the poem and your perspective.   ....jo
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16 posted 2004-05-25 10:24 AM


"I want my solitude back"

~ For me, harmony comes from balancing my time as a social butterfly with my self-imposed time of solitude.

It is so important to take that time out for ourself. We must claim it, or we lose a piece of ourselves to everyone around us. I really felt your words.

Warm hugs,
Linda

gemjop
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17 posted 2004-05-28 01:41 PM


imagine if those people who make you feel like being alone, independent, solitary, knew that they did! I sometimes think about that. I think that feeling can sometimes be more powerful and calming than any other i've known.

missed you susan. xxx


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