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Aenimal
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0 posted 2004-05-21 01:21 AM


truths lay dying in the grass
victims of the coiled tongue
of serpentine semantics

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1 posted 2004-05-21 02:21 AM


very deep
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2 posted 2004-05-21 09:37 AM


Good to see new work from you
zenny
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3 posted 2004-05-21 10:13 AM


1 word: "wow"
very nice write!
zenny

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4 posted 2004-05-21 10:57 AM


victims of the coiled tongue - I like that,
very true

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5 posted 2004-05-21 11:31 AM


What a powerful depiction of something that happens all too often!
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6 posted 2004-05-21 12:35 PM


"serpentine semantics"

yes, youve got this worded in such a way that i cant find a way to comment on it!
in awe maybe?

Susan
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7 posted 2004-05-21 08:19 PM


I really like this and its imagry.  Excellent.

Susan

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8 posted 2004-05-21 09:28 PM


Excellent, Raph!

Earth's crammed with heaven, and every common bush afire with God, but only he who sees takes off his shoes.
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9 posted 2004-05-21 10:11 PM


Superb imagery Bello, it's so great to see your words here.



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10 posted 2004-05-22 12:23 PM


Usually, tho ya know I love the poet in you I shy away from some of your stuff cause you can be very, very deep sometimes and I just get confused which is easy enough for me to do.   You know me, Southern Belle....so Im usually into that love, pain, scar my heart burn my soul kinna stuff...
With all that being said...I really liked this one!!

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11 posted 2004-05-22 12:28 PM


yup
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12 posted 2004-05-22 01:22 AM


Ooooh Raph.. nice one.
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13 posted 2004-05-22 01:25 AM


I love it when you sneak in such a superb snake write.

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14 posted 2004-05-22 01:28 AM


I agree!!

Aenimal
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15 posted 2004-05-22 04:27 AM


Many thanks you're all too kind

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16 posted 2004-05-22 04:37 PM


Dear Raffaele, this is an intense shot of truth!
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17 posted 2004-05-22 04:57 PM




An astute observation in a few words, Raph.

Myself, I just had to quit going there. (and yep, I think you know what I mean)


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18 posted 2004-05-23 05:58 PM


WOW -- made me think of politicians and the talking heads on the news!
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