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0 posted 2004-05-20 10:37 PM


A View From Palos Verdes

Pines wait here patient for the rains,
for sun and wind off the wide blue sea
and for us, above this scrub oak hill
where needles pile soft in the shade
and a lone dove, at home here, watches
from behind her little screen of leaves.

There was never a house, only pines,
but they build house enough. We look out
at sage and waves under a denim sky,
the carpet deep, with a few stones
scattered like chessmen after the game.
The breeze turns salt cool, soft as dovesong.

Our meadow is seasoned yellow, mustard flowers
sprung today, with fingers of last year’s dill.
Along the path below, a willow, incongruous
as the ropeswing that whirls us back and back,
winding a charm to turn us children for a moment,
while the lone gray dove, unused to all this fuss,
looks on behind her little screen of leaves.

© Copyright 2004 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-05-20 10:57 PM


In the first stanza, with remembrance of scrub oak,
came thought of mustard, and I was going to ask,
write of mustard,
but in the third stanza, you did...

thank you
for bring some home
to me.

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2 posted 2004-05-20 11:00 PM


Somehow it's become a very special flower to me, plain and simple as it is. These days I can't look at it without reliving every place and every circumstance I've seen it in, or so it feels.

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3 posted 2004-05-20 11:02 PM


Plain, simple, hearty...hardy...
it survives.

Like poetry.

Susan
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4 posted 2004-05-20 11:06 PM


A beautiful picture painted here.  I especially like the references to the dove.

Susan

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5 posted 2004-05-20 11:45 PM


Ratleader,
     If you paint this well with words, I would be intrigued at how well you'd paint with a brush!   You've masterfully created
a scene where I can feel the carpet of pine needles under my bare feet, feel the twists of the rope swing as in the breeze.  Glad you dotted this with wild mustard and the dove.  Enjoyed this exquisite write!
             Sadie



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6 posted 2004-05-21 12:33 PM


Nice descriptive writing...James
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7 posted 2004-05-21 12:53 PM


I very much enjoyed your colourful view from Palos Verdes!

Beautifully descriptive writing!!!

Sending you a great big hug,
EA

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8 posted 2004-05-21 01:09 AM


Ed

The view of your words is beautiful from this chair.  Thank you for taking me.  

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10 posted 2004-05-21 11:09 AM


You paint so vividly I can literally see the mustard bending to the breeze... you speak so softly the dove is not threatened into flight... what a beautiful work you've shared with us!
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11 posted 2004-05-21 12:29 PM


i need a view like that
thank you for sharing yours

RobertB
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12 posted 2004-05-21 07:02 PM


Wow...what poetic musings here.

I am humbled
by this compilation of words
orderly marching through my brain
taking my imagination
to where it really needs to be.....
home........

Robert


I thank you for your comments on my poem yesterday.

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13 posted 2004-05-23 03:06 AM


A lovely view, wistfulness is felt.  
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14 posted 2004-05-23 10:52 AM


Ed, I love this picture of your words.
You are so good at telling what you see.
Thanks for sharing your mind's eye with us.
Hugs,
Ethel

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15 posted 2004-05-23 08:07 PM


Lovvely words from your pen and heart Sir rat

Mxx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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16 posted 2005-08-11 10:01 AM


Along the path below, a willow, incongruous
as the ropeswing that whirls us back and back,
winding a charm to turn us children for a moment,

You give more than an incredible view... you give a lift of spirits that settles into peacefulness... most welcome! *S*

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17 posted 2007-10-29 02:21 PM


lovely

ARCTIC WIND

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