How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #32 Archive
 A View From Palos Verdes
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

A View From Palos Verdes

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Ratleader
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 01-23-2003
Posts 7179
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass


0 posted 05-20-2004 10:37 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

A View From Palos Verdes

Pines wait here patient for the rains,
for sun and wind off the wide blue sea
and for us, above this scrub oak hill
where needles pile soft in the shade
and a lone dove, at home here, watches
from behind her little screen of leaves.

There was never a house, only pines,
but they build house enough. We look out
at sage and waves under a denim sky,
the carpet deep, with a few stones
scattered like chessmen after the game.
The breeze turns salt cool, soft as dovesong.

Our meadow is seasoned yellow, mustard flowers
sprung today, with fingers of last year’s dill.
Along the path below, a willow, incongruous
as the ropeswing that whirls us back and back,
winding a charm to turn us children for a moment,
while the lone gray dove, unused to all this fuss,
looks on behind her little screen of leaves.
© Copyright 2004 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Caelestus
since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


1 posted 05-20-2004 10:57 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

In the first stanza, with remembrance of scrub oak,
came thought of mustard, and I was going to ask,
write of mustard,
but in the third stanza, you did...

thank you
for bring some home
to me.
Ratleader
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 01-23-2003
Posts 7179
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass


2 posted 05-20-2004 11:00 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Somehow it's become a very special flower to me, plain and simple as it is. These days I can't look at it without reliving every place and every circumstance I've seen it in, or so it feels.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Caelestus
since 06-25-99
Posts 67715
Listening to every heart


3 posted 05-20-2004 11:02 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Plain, simple, hearty...hardy...
it survives.

Like poetry.
Susan
Member Ascendant
since 03-27-2004
Posts 5169
walking the surreal


4 posted 05-20-2004 11:06 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

A beautiful picture painted here.  I especially like the references to the dove.

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Sadelite
Member Elite
since 10-11-2003
Posts 2561


5 posted 05-20-2004 11:45 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Ratleader,
     If you paint this well with words, I would be intrigued at how well you'd paint with a brush!   You've masterfully created
a scene where I can feel the carpet of pine needles under my bare feet, feel the twists of the rope swing as in the breeze.  Glad you dotted this with wild mustard and the dove.  Enjoyed this exquisite write!
             Sadie


JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 11-16-1999
Posts 31622
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA


6 posted 05-21-2004 12:33 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice descriptive writing...James
Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 08-27-2002
Posts 40647
Realms of Light


7 posted 05-21-2004 12:53 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

I very much enjoyed your colourful view from Palos Verdes!

Beautifully descriptive writing!!!

Sending you a great big hug,
EA
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 09-21-1999
Posts 28608
California


8 posted 05-21-2004 01:09 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ed

The view of your words is beautiful from this chair.  Thank you for taking me.  
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 08-26-99
Posts 46297
displaced


9 posted 05-21-2004 02:34 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

suthern
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 07-29-99
Posts 20770
on the threshold of a dream


10 posted 05-21-2004 11:09 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

You paint so vividly I can literally see the mustard bending to the breeze... you speak so softly the dove is not threatened into flight... what a beautiful work you've shared with us!
muted
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 01-15-2004
Posts 3021
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving


11 posted 05-21-2004 12:29 PM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

i need a view like that
thank you for sharing yours
RobertB
Senior Member
since 09-26-1999
Posts 1121
Champaign, IL


12 posted 05-21-2004 07:02 PM       View Profile for RobertB   Email RobertB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RobertB

Wow...what poetic musings here.

I am humbled
by this compilation of words
orderly marching through my brain
taking my imagination
to where it really needs to be.....
home........

Robert


I thank you for your comments on my poem yesterday.
iliana
Member Patricius
since 12-05-2003
Posts 13488
USA


13 posted 05-23-2004 03:06 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

A lovely view, wistfulness is felt.  
garysgirl
Deputy Moderator 10 ToursDeputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 09-29-2002
Posts 20064
Florida, USA


14 posted 05-23-2004 10:52 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Ed, I love this picture of your words.
You are so good at telling what you see.
Thanks for sharing your mind's eye with us.
Hugs,
Ethel
Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 08-04-99
Posts 10270


15 posted 05-23-2004 08:07 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Lovvely words from your pen and heart Sir rat

Mxx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

suthern
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 07-29-99
Posts 20770
on the threshold of a dream


16 posted 08-11-2005 10:01 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Along the path below, a willow, incongruous
as the ropeswing that whirls us back and back,
winding a charm to turn us children for a moment,

You give more than an incredible view... you give a lift of spirits that settles into peacefulness... most welcome! *S*
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 09-16-2007
Posts 8075
Realm of Supernatural


17 posted 10-29-2007 02:21 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

lovely

ARCTIC WIND
Ratleader will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #32 >> A View From Palos Verdes Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors