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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2004-05-18 01:05 AM


Shake Her Like
A Polaroid Picture


I never knew I
would fall so
hard for her,
Who ever does?
To me it's like
listening to a record
over and over again.
The best one's start
to grow on you.
The first time you
already know you like it,
still it takes a
while to be sure.
Well, now I'm sure.
Suzie, if you
only knew how I
feel about you,
it would shake
you to your bones.


JamesLee
May18
2004


JamesLee

© Copyright 2004 JamesMichael - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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1 posted 2004-05-18 01:28 AM


Gorgeous, Michael!  Great analogy!   ...jo

[This message has been edited by iliana (05-19-2004 03:03 AM).]

passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-05-18 03:26 AM


this is precious!
JL
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since 2004-04-01
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3 posted 2004-05-18 05:23 PM


Good one James!

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


JamesMichael
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4 posted 2004-05-19 12:50 PM


Thank you iliana, passing shadows and JL for the nice responses...James
Bonnie j
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5 posted 2004-05-19 09:12 AM


Your title is a real eye catcher.
I was bringing up a picture of this in my mind. Now when I take a Polaroid I kind of swing it up and down like a swing and maybe twirl around. Boy if I did that to a person they might wind up in a tree.LOL
Good Jobber
BonBon

choshi
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since 2004-01-01
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6 posted 2004-05-19 10:45 AM


James,

Great write....playful yet strong and heartfelt....~P

Foxyoasis
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7 posted 2004-05-19 11:14 AM


very nice

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


Corinne
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8 posted 2004-05-20 11:48 AM



How senusous, James!

one nit:

The best one's start

(there should be no apostophe on one's -
it's plural non-possesive).
Corinne

Ericc
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9 posted 2004-05-20 01:51 PM


Great write!

Eric

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2004-05-21 12:12 PM


Thank you Bonnie, choshi, Foxy, Corinne and Ericc for the nice responses...Corinne I tried to edit it but it was too late...English was not my best subject...did I even have a best subject...I think it was girl watching...James
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