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brian sites
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0 posted 2004-05-17 11:45 PM



friction makes me sing
high tension
wire
        sing
it
slowly
ever so
               takes
          away

every day
  it            does

but
that's how you make a

   song

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Martie
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1 posted 2004-05-17 11:47 PM


Brian

I think you're right...that, and other things!  Love your poetry.

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2004-05-17 11:51 PM


tonight I wish I could just hum a few bars...

sigh?

sigh.


brian sites
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3 posted 2004-05-17 11:55 PM


then a few bars...
will behum---

a Songus!

smile

thank you Martie...

and thank you...
Aiwe

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4 posted 2004-05-18 04:09 AM


nice!
Dark Angel
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5 posted 2004-05-18 07:34 AM


I love the way you look at things

most enjoyed Brian.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

wranx
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6 posted 2004-05-18 08:38 AM


I've often marveled at the "construct" of your writings..and now wonder if doing this...

friction
          makes me
sing high tension

wire
        sing
it
slowly
ever so
     takes
           away

                 every day
  it            does

but
that's
    how you make a

  song

...changes the meaning enough NOT to be plagerism? hehehe

I like this little ditty dude.

Sunshine
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7 posted 2004-05-18 09:44 AM


Repeating wranx just enough to say...
I like this little dittie, dude.

ThisDiamond
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8 posted 2004-05-18 11:41 AM


There's an echo in here...and it is just as good each time around.
TD

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