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Sybil
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0 posted 2004-05-17 02:21 PM



Accursed Cursive

The rummaging had gone on
long enough,
he, pulling to the fore, the past
throwing her cards and notes in her face
in snarl of past lust ~

                             Did you not mean what you said
                                    when you wrote these words?


Anger colored the walls again.

She shook her head, but only in solemnity
of the moment’s waste,

In faltering voice, spoke, yes, I did.

She did not step to the fore of his front
nor would her tongue trip loose the words
to slice this moments truth

but in silent thought, held once more,

My words you would rue,
for then as now
I did my best,
promising love
through all your tests,
but see the push of the pen engraved,
feel the embossing of the lines I made?
Can you not see, nor feel the intent,
I wanted to fulfill the words that were lent
in total spirit of
                                         what could be

only, just as then,
you’ve killed it once again, you see.


For only in a good love
will truest words live on,
to float in the Garden of Trust.

© Copyright 2004 Sybil - All Rights Reserved
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2 posted 2004-05-17 02:52 PM


so much profound emotions..excellent
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3 posted 2004-05-17 03:02 PM


awesome! sad but awesome!
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4 posted 2004-05-17 03:07 PM


Deeply moving in its depth -- enjoyed.

Susan

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5 posted 2004-05-17 03:22 PM


Sybil
Good words, good thoughts, good read.

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6 posted 2004-05-17 04:02 PM


Sybil

"She did not step to the fore of his front
nor would her tongue trip loose the words
to slice this moments truth"

There is much emotive truth in this poem...a powerful scene!  


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7 posted 2004-05-17 04:41 PM


Powerfully written..packed with emotion.
Excellent read....well done.
Hugs~

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Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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8 posted 2004-05-17 04:54 PM


And he'll never know he killed it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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9 posted 2004-05-17 11:08 PM


Where no trust lives, nor will love.  Nicely done Sybil
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10 posted 2004-05-17 11:13 PM


Your poem captivated me.  Too bad things don't always go the way we wish...
                     Take care,
                      Sadie

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11 posted 2004-05-18 09:18 AM


throwing her cards and notes in her face
in snarl of past lust ~

                             Did you not mean what you said
                                    when you wrote these words?


Guilty as charged...I have done exactly this, and what a mistake it was. The very asking forces an answer that is loss itself, kills any hope of salvaging the feeling behind the words.

Holding on, declaring the road to be taken instead of dithering in the woods, that's what really makes all the difference....that and, and once the road's chosen, following it to the end.

One of the seven poems I lost this week was called "The Road Not Worth Taking"....I'm attempting to recapture it, and this poem inspires me to go on.

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12 posted 2004-05-24 09:12 AM


My words you would rue,
for then as now
I did my best,
promising love
through all your tests,
but see the push of the pen engraved,
feel the embossing of the lines I made?
Can you not see, nor feel the intent,
I wanted to fulfill the words that were lent
in total spirit of
                                         what could be

only, just as then,
you’ve killed it once again, you see.

========================================
... ... ...  damn ... ... ...

*heavy sigh* (ykikykik)

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13 posted 2004-05-24 09:13 AM


oh and..........

(IWIHWT!!!!)

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14 posted 2004-05-24 12:17 PM


Well done -- I liked the way you pulled the reader into this; like watching a play.  
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