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Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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Melbourne, Australia

0 posted 2004-05-16 09:50 PM



Picture by Alan Ayers

* * *

My life loses its focus
And dark clouds block my view
True happiness eludes me
When I'm not with you

I sit alone beside the window
Far off into space I stare
My day is void of color
Behind closed doors my heart lays bare

The sun has trouble shining
The wind blows harsh and cold
I miss your arms around me
And your hand for me to hold

My eyes have lost their lustre
My heart has turned from red to blue
For you, my soul is searching
As my heart pines for you

Suddenly the sky is clearing
And to my delight I see
True love has once again returned
For you've come home to me

* * *

"There is only one happiness in life,
to love and be loved"


I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

© Copyright 2004 Sue Tancheff - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2004-05-16 10:06 PM


It certainly helps...James
Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
2 posted 2004-05-16 10:57 PM


Hear, hear.  And what a beautiful picture to compliment your loving words.

Smiles -- Susan

GlisteningRain
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since 2004-05-06
Posts 103
The clouds
3 posted 2004-05-16 11:45 PM


I reminisce a memory I made. A love that never was; in haze. Captured every emotion almost..except the galaxy in my palm..just one of many in my heart...removed. The pain that soothes my nothingness, Aching my everything.
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
4 posted 2004-05-17 12:44 PM


Suetang -- this is one of my very favorites of all the beautiful pieces you've written.  I really loved every verse and especially the way you resolved the poem.   ......jo
HopeS
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since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia
5 posted 2004-05-17 02:12 AM


Sue I can understand the "When I'm Not With You " days ....I am still yearning , hoping he will be returning ,  I was so glad to hear someone special had returned to you
Hope

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2004-05-17 03:33 AM


beautiful!
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
7 posted 2004-05-17 03:54 AM


Sue

Nice images and nicely done as usual!


Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

MGROVES
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california
8 posted 2004-05-17 04:01 AM


loved this and the picture


Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

9 posted 2004-05-17 04:55 AM


Beautiful..heartfelt..well done..

Goldenrose.

''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies.
My brain and my heart are my temples; my philosophy is kindness''-  Dalai Lama

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia
10 posted 2004-05-17 09:19 PM


Thank you all so very much for your wonderful comments.

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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