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GlisteningRain
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since 2004-05-06
Posts 103
The clouds

0 posted 2004-05-16 03:26 AM



Shattered..by a man...
like even women shatter..
men
nothing like being left
to die....out of love..
like I die...out of love
with you
love being the root
I could end my pain..with a sharp point..fragile..through flesh..
when you shake your head
I could make me love no longer...with a sharp point...fragile...through flesh
don't even she says...
I Don't Glorify...Suicide...Only Wish...I Didn't Feel For You...Wish I Couldn't Feel...Like You...

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passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2004-05-16 03:28 AM


I like the format...it's different...theme is good too
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2004-05-16 11:12 AM


The only way to end a love like that would be a death...
Understood that oh so well.
TD

Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
3 posted 2004-05-17 03:14 PM


This speaks of such loss and pain.  Well penned.

Susan

majnu
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since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088
SF Bay Area
4 posted 2004-05-19 01:17 PM


the formatting was new but I felt it worked. well done.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

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