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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2004-05-15 07:15 AM


A Poetic Tear

My butterfly has lost her aim
Drunk on nectar from my frame
Whipped her lips in flutter dips
And skips upon the wind in quips.

Erratic in erotic bane
A dance macabre that seems insane
And thought my nectar brews in true
The sweet of it has lost its coup

So now my petals close to night
Those nettles of the day and flight
And I am less in changing chime
The rhythm of my given time

Alas alack there is no knack
There is no path that leads us back
It moves in one directions course
From one and only timeless source

So when the silver shines the moon
Weave the strands a strong cocoon.

© Copyright 2004 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-05-15 07:24 AM


Your butterfly may have lost her aim,
but I know your moth hasn't.

A winsome read, dear Sy,
please, let me pour the tea
and we'll watch the clouds
as they scuttle by...


Goldenrose
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2 posted 2004-05-15 07:25 AM


Very good writing Sey..i always enjoy your ryming style...thank you..

Goldenrose.


''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies.
My brain and my heart are my temples; my philosophy is kindness''-  Dalai Lama

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2004-05-15 09:01 AM


My butterfly has lost her aim
Drunk on nectar from my frame
Whipped her lips in flutter dips
And skips upon the wind in quips.

Erratic in erotic bane
A dance macabre that seems insane
And thought my nectar brews in true
The sweet of it has lost its coup

=-=================================
Sy--Sy--Sy--
butterflies always fly away...its their nature...
tis the moths that are faithful

Your poetic timing is perfect..we went to the butterfly house yesterday...had 2 land on my shoulder.

We are headed for the river today...
Can Randy swim?  lol

*ww*

I love you more the further I go ...
before this existence ... you were always here inside of me.

Nelly Furtado


scorpio
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4 posted 2004-05-15 09:15 AM


"So when the silver shines the moon
Weave the strands a strong cocoon."

Words well woven Sy.  

believe in what your heart feels...

Magnus
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5 posted 2004-05-15 09:19 AM


I do relate to this,  more than one might
ever realize....

A winsome write...from a heart courageous.

Enchantress
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6 posted 2004-05-15 09:57 AM


Wonderful morning write Sy!
Do you have time for tea?
Good..I'll pour.
~Morning hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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7 posted 2004-05-15 10:16 AM


i dont know what to say other than, this touched me..and in that, it was enjoyed
Martie
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8 posted 2004-05-15 10:38 AM


Sy

"Alas alack there is no knack
There is no path that leads us back
It moves in one directions course
From one and only timeless source"

You are wise and wonderful!  

passing shadows
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9 posted 2004-05-15 02:12 PM


good write
Ericc
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10 posted 2004-05-15 02:42 PM


As always...beautifuly lyrical.

Eric

Margherita
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11 posted 2004-05-16 06:04 AM


quote:
Alas alack there is no knack
There is no path that leads us back
It moves in one directions course
From one and only timeless source

So when the silver shines the moon
Weave the strands a strong cocoon.



Yes, .... "timeless source" is comforting, you see.
Beautiful, very beautiful, dear Seymour.
Love and hugs. Margherita

Beki
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12 posted 2004-05-16 06:33 AM


so beautiful my friend. I am usually put off by rhyme but you always use it so subtly and skillfully - this is just another lovely example!
Patricia
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13 posted 2004-05-16 09:33 AM


Your writing never ceases to amaze and enlighten me.

Patricia

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14 posted 2004-05-16 10:10 AM



Sleep deep, Sweet Sonneter, cradled in a cocoon of silver lunar strands of love.

Angel hugs,
EA

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15 posted 2004-05-16 10:19 AM


and sigh....

~~**~~
le vent chante avec le calme doux
calme de nuit
sien beauté sur mes lèvres
~~**~~

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16 posted 2004-05-16 10:31 AM


Seymour~
Your rhyme greets me in the morning ...
and lasts the whole day through~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

hoot_owl_rn
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17 posted 2004-05-16 11:52 AM


Alas, sometimes there is no turning back, but sometimes what waits ahead can be even better
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