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Down to Earth |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Down to Earth “You,” he spoke in an understated way, “are highly pragmatic, in the best sense.” It was a critical assumption, no game, this, for he would play none, and I identified with various equations of the word. He did not mean hard-nosed, I was sure. Neither did he intend that my heritage was speaking for itself. We had talked of idealism, even while he knew of my yearn for utopia, still and all, he knew I knew it was not to be, not in any of my lifetimes. Nor had it been. He likened my sensibilities to rock-salt; a little goes a long way; and he averred that I still had a long way to go. With that said, and I having no place to go, he poured another glass of wine, then we turned our attention, once again, to the impracticalities of our association, and McKuen. After which, life lifted and earth lost me for a little while. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Terrific poem! You draw the reader in with youro special talent.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice ending |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deca A wonderful scene...gave me just enough to imagine the rest....only the best know how to do that.  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Excellent... JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Deca, I echo Martie. Well Done  Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change. |
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IndigoEve Member
since 2003-01-10
Posts 279Etched in the illusion of time |
Brilliancy. If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"then we turned our attention, once again, to the impracticalities of our association, and McKuen. After which, life lifted and earth lost me for a little while." Oh yes Deca..to this I can relate. Well done. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: ... and still we yearn ... Great piece, vivid scenery. Love, Margherita |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
it's easy to see you are influenced by McKuen you have the same sense of words with meaning and higher meaning. Excellent job here. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a smile you write...of sensibilities and living poetry. Liked this very much. A little flirty at the ending...grin. TD |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You be duh..... woman? Yanno you are quite good at this. So much wrapped within little calculated lines. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
enjoyed the read |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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