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MERCURY
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0 posted 2004-05-13 05:33 AM



There doesn’t seem to be too much left in the tank these days.

I get up half-heartedly,

Weary from lack of sleep.

I lift my right arm as my left is still searching for some blood.

My face feels numb, unkempt and unloved.

My newborn legs struggle to keep up with my movements.

As my eyes flicker and tick to destination sight,

The day ahead fills me with sadness.

“Same old same old” reverberates in my dusty mind.

Maybe if I began peddling backwards I can get out of my life cycle.

At this moment a glorious vision of my youth implodes within my memory bank.

A wry grin comes like a tsunami to my wet drooled lips.

This is the plateau of my day.


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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2004-05-13 11:52 AM


And with that memory of youth, you found the right uplift.... and from that plateau the view is clear and encouraging.
Very good write.
Margherita

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2004-05-13 12:00 PM


Get those "newborn legs" peddling into a glorious vision of your future!

Your tsunami grin put one on my face as well!

As Mercury is the closest planet to the Sun, you must have lots of Apollonian power in you yet to be tapped!


EA

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-05-13 12:22 PM


wonderful! wonderful!
JL
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Texas, USA
4 posted 2004-05-13 01:55 PM


Excellent!
JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


LeeJ
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5 posted 2004-05-14 07:24 AM


Extremely visual and felt at times...smiles and hugs
Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
6 posted 2004-05-14 08:33 AM


The last few lines grabbed me...

regards
sudhir

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