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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2004-05-11 09:18 AM

On Rising Thoughts

If I rise to the lips above me,
is it not an exercise in futility?

Would it not have a temporary hold,
one that will not find the time
to reimburse with the comfort
of consistency?

Would I survive the risk, as I glisten
from the form of you, the poetic image
that shapes my every move, erasing the pain
of what is to come, even if only for the moment?

Would I sacrifice the Me of me,
for the You of you, and chance an embracing
of the More of more, the interaction
reducing the weight, lifting me easier
and easier than the one before

to those lips above...

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

1 posted 2004-05-11 09:34 AM

nice

Can you hear my cries, can you hear my pleads, will you watch me burn...or would you bleed for me?

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-05-11 10:33 AM

of the More of more, the interaction
reducing the weight, lifting me easier
and easier than the one before

Good one! Enjoyed

Startime55
Member Elite

since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

3 posted 2004-05-11 10:40 AM

WOW!!!Senually beautiful....but don't give up the You of You...just join and become We....**hugs**

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2004-05-11 11:44 AM

Oh, yes, Dear M! Always reach for the "More of more"! ~ just don't lose the you of you in the process!

EA

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2004-05-11 12:30 PM

I understand

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

6 posted 2004-05-11 02:07 PM

Maureen...Tender write. Enjoyed...Paul

Would I sacrifice the Me of me,
for the You of you, and chance an embracing
of the More of more, the interaction
reducing the weight, lifting me easier
and easier than the one before

Many thoughts to ponder in the above verse.

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2004-05-11 05:22 PM

Thank you all..was just doing some wishful thinking this morning...

Karen, so nice to see you here

M

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2004-05-11 07:41 PM

WOW!
You’re too sexy for your poem….

Sorry that song hit me right between the first line and the last line!
Such a vision I got from this write. Wonderful poem!

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

9 posted 2004-05-12 05:36 AM

...glad you could envision my words

M

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

10 posted 2004-05-13 09:40 AM

Beuatiful expression of lived truth Maureen.
Although the form is different it read for me like classical sonnet...such a mix of language, truth and feelings...Thank you ~P

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