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Unrefined
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Unrefined A dream of mind of kindest kind Painted shadows unrefined Swept into a fires ring Lighting red a flaming spring The golden mornings sparkled dew The mist had lift the sun was new The air was full of precious prime The hourglass had stopped its time. Its how a soul can catch of wrought? The weightless weight of flighty thought The vapors of a living crest The essence of a thing so blest Yet there she stays before my eye Beyond a heartbeats heave of sigh Impressions of a field of feel Hallucinations cast of real Touché of an epee blade Stands an altar I have made |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
and I am awake still this morning to share it with you |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
Impressions of a field of feel Hallucinations cast of real All hallucinations are real. GREAT poem, nicely written, and nicely ended. and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Those moment betwixt dreams and real Where we more sense than feel When those castles crash from the sky With the opening of an eye. Gloom |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"The golden mornings sparkled dew The mist had lift the sun was new The air was full of precious prime The hourglass had stopped its time." Love your verse this morning Sy! Especially the above stanza. Time for tea? I'll pour. ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words, |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Simply beautiful Sy. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ I cannot think of a lovelier read to jump-start the day~ THIS IS GORGEOUS !!! And, as always, a read-aloud makes it all the more special~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The golden mornings sparkled dew The mist had lift the sun was new The air was full of precious prime The hourglass had stopped its time. ~*~ This brought to mind the movie I watched over the weekend - Master and Commander Throughout the movie, you never saw the face that went with the hand that turned the hourglass at the last moment before the last grain fell into the past hour. Sometimes, the hand even "clinked" the glass to get the last grain of sand to "hurry". And I thought..."what would happen if that particular man were to be gunned down in battle. Who would watch the keep of time, then?" A good, pondering poem, Sy...thank you, m'friend.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Yet there she stays before my eye Beyond a heartbeats heave of sigh Impressions of a field of feel Hallucinations cast of real Outstanding muse you have this morn...a lovely read! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely wonderful Seymour  Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The air was full of precious prime ========================= yeppers..it happens everytime I read your rhymes out loud.  Touché of an epee blade Stands an altar I have made if you get any cooler...Randy will be a dragon-cicle. *L* ya make the sky sigh with one Sy-babes... the moth too.  *ww*   I love you more the further I go ... before this existence ... you were always here inside of me. Nelly Furtado |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, You are sweet. LucidityNow You are kind. Professor, Thank you so much for that response. Nancy, Love your hugs and tea. scorpio Thank you my friend Marge, You are a doll, hugs. Sunshine Thank you for the beautiful comment. Hugs. LeeJ Thanks for the lovely. Maree, Thanks for the absolutely. JM, Your name always brightens my flame. WWRS |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
iliana Thank you sweet, you came in just as I finished my response. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, Mr. T.! These following lines take my breath away: "The golden mornings sparkled dew The mist had lift the sun was new The air was full of precious prime The hourglass had stopped its time." ~ Precious momes, indeed! Have a glorious day of golden light! EA |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Sigh...the vision came through with ease and touched the heart so tenderly...This poem is stunning in its beauty and complete in how it makes the heart feel...I love it.. |
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GlisteningRain Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 103The clouds |
amazing...you have a way with words. -B |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel Love when you say those nice things. Startime55, A very sweet comment, thank you. GlisteningRain, Thank you, thank you. |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Excellent poem! Enjoyed. She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Impressions of a field of feel Hallucinations cast of real I enjoy your poetry so much. The sounds, the flow, images |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JL Thank you for the excellent Sadelite Enjoy your comments, thank you. |
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