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Sunshine
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0 posted 2004-05-09 07:33 AM





Happy Mother’s Dance


Sometimes in our righteous madness
of correcting all the wrongs
our men and children look at us
thinking we are strong.

All I know is, we could cavort,
and twirl in lunacy
as when our hearts are sorely pained
in understanding ~ we.

They think that we should know it all,
by this brilliance in our eyes,
as we scrabble for the words
to hide harsh truths in sighs.

For no one should, or ever will
know all the truths we hold ~
though forever we, in words distill
these moral skeins of gold…

so should I spy your dancing feet,
your arms upraised to skies
as tears come shine upon your cheeks
in life’s refrain’s reprise

know I hear the hold of you
know I see the gold in you.


© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-05-09 07:36 AM


Nice poem Sunshine a great one
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2 posted 2004-05-09 07:38 AM


Sighhh Karilea... I'm keeping it.

M xx

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3 posted 2004-05-09 07:39 AM


Shhhhhhh - Don't say this to Sunshine - but - this is a "rhyming and metered" poem... and it makes me feel like dancing...

Happy Mother's Day, Sunshine...

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4 posted 2004-05-09 08:00 AM


something a little different than the usual hallmark variety; your own signature style shining thru; have a happy
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5 posted 2004-05-09 08:47 AM



so should I spy your dancing feet,
your arms upraised to skies
as tears come shine upon your cheeks
in life’s refrain’s reprise

know I hear the hold of you
know I see the gold in you.


and in you....
Have a Wonderful Mother's Day, Karilea


M

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6 posted 2004-05-09 10:00 AM


"so should I spy your dancing feet,
your arms upraised to skies
as tears come shine upon your cheeks
in life’s refrain’s reprise

know I hear the hold of you
know I see the gold in you."

Beautiful!!!  Happy Mother's Day Karilea!

~ Trace my body with your words,
  in doing so, you touch my heart ~

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7 posted 2004-05-09 11:54 AM


Happy Mother's Day Karilea....
this is is a beautiful dance....
we see the gold in you every day!



~~**~~
le vent chante avec le calme doux
calme de nuit
sien beauté sur mes lèvres
~~**~~

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8 posted 2004-05-09 12:47 PM


gawd! I love it when you rhyme!

Happy Mother's Day Karilea

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9 posted 2004-05-09 12:54 PM


Happy Mother's Day my dear woman.
You are strikingly beautiful in every single word and way.
TD

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10 posted 2004-05-09 01:01 PM


My goodness, it's lovely and it rhymes.  Happy Mother's Day Karilea, enjoy it.
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11 posted 2004-05-09 01:21 PM


How stunningly lovely this is, Karilea!

Happy Mother's Day!
Corinne (who had jelly and butter toast and raisin bran and cranberry juice brought to my bed at the crack of dawn by my son!)

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12 posted 2004-05-09 02:00 PM


Happy Mother's Day Karilea.  Enjoy the dance.

believe in what your heart feels...

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13 posted 2004-05-09 02:13 PM


Brilliant, Karilea!  Happy Mother's Day!  
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14 posted 2004-05-09 06:49 PM


Beautiful tribute!

Eric

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15 posted 2004-05-09 09:33 PM


Karilea:

This is a wonderful poem!  I love it and I would like to keep it too.  

Happy Mother's Day to you also!  Hope you've had a really nice day.

Thank you
Love
Betty Lou

Betty Lou Hebert

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16 posted 2004-05-09 10:02 PM


Karilea...So Tender and enjoyable to read. Thanks for sharing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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17 posted 2004-05-09 10:33 PM


Karilea,
Sometimes knowledge withheld is wisdom dispensed. This is wonderful. Happy Mother's Day.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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