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velociraptor
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0 posted 2004-05-09 07:03 AM


THE AGES

I have imagined walking through the future
and back into the past
what i found there was a real big blast

I discovered a glamorous jewel
one that looked like a great big pool
one that said never dive to deep
or you will suffer the bends
so don’t run into me
or I’ll say

the END

Daniel

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1 posted 2004-05-09 07:12 AM


Smiling at you son...

one that said never dive to deep
or you will suffer the bends


You have said alot in just these two lines alone.

love you Chumna

I'm adding this to my library..of course

Mum

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~Stevie Nicks~

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-05-09 07:29 AM


Daniel, a very good poem for your first entrance into Passions!  We've been waiting, and I, for one, am very pleased!  I know a young man who is quite fond of dinosaurs and such - perhaps someday I can introduce you to him.

Now, go hug your Mom!

Welcome to Passions!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?  Keeping in mind, I must stand close...

velociraptor
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3 posted 2004-05-09 07:34 AM


Thanks you Sunshine for the lovley comment

Daniel

wranx
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4 posted 2004-05-09 09:22 AM


Hey Danieldude!
I've often imagined a stroll through time as well. In fact, its a good way to find out exactly where you are right this minute.

Cool poem!

~wranx

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5 posted 2004-05-09 10:06 AM




WOW!!  WELCOME TO PASSIONS DANIEL!
I see excellent writing runs in the family.
I very much enjoyed reading your first post.
And, I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


1slick_lady
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6 posted 2004-05-09 10:08 AM


welcome to passions
the romantic fanatic
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7 posted 2004-05-09 10:15 AM


Nicely done. And, of course, welcome!
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8 posted 2004-05-09 10:16 AM


This is absolutely gorgeous... It looks like DA's little acorn has turned into his own poetry oak...
I can't wait to see more.

I AM smiling...
And tht fact should be enough to cause you to worry.

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9 posted 2004-05-09 11:02 AM


Lovely to have you back Daniel! Not only is your rhyming great but great use of metaphor too! Hope to see you again

(check your email for a special PIP greeting)

ThisDiamond
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10 posted 2004-05-09 12:00 PM


Welcome...strong entrance.
ThisDiamond

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11 posted 2004-05-09 12:49 PM


hi Daniel!

welcome to Passions!

velociraptor
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12 posted 2004-05-10 06:58 AM


thanks everybody
Aenimal
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13 posted 2004-05-10 08:39 AM


Excellent post Daniel, keep it up! Looking forward to your next.
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