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brian sites
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0 posted 2004-05-08 12:36 PM



   a small picket fence
of people            looking
   fuzzy to the east

      the grass too high and wet

  and the melody dripped down
on the cobblestones of the drone

breath made love with morning
                               fog
       shaking sleep
from eyes like windyflags

   the lull of the bag
and the caffeine of pipes

       like ice blown monochrome
            from winter's trees
                  
                 the highest notes on a piano
         and the solid earth below middle C

waiting
expectant

     till the bag and pipes....

the drone of all the insects in the world
and the melody of crazy beginnings

made this
     Morning

Blush

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2004-05-08 12:40 PM


hf...WOW!

I'm keeping it.

Maree

What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!


brian sites
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2 posted 2004-05-08 12:48 PM


thanks Maree...


Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
3 posted 2004-05-08 01:26 AM


damn you, give me some of dat muse
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
4 posted 2004-05-08 11:43 AM



Oh dang...
dang...

wow...

icebox
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since 2003-05-03
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in the shadows
5 posted 2004-05-08 11:55 AM


The piper at the gates of dawn has always been a great image.

excellent write, Sir!

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
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6 posted 2004-05-08 01:41 PM


fantastically woven! interlaced images, senses...and I love the "made the morning Blush" most of all!

A truly nice piece!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

passing shadows
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displaced
7 posted 2004-05-08 01:45 PM


wow...had to read this twice!
serenity blaze
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8 posted 2004-05-08 01:51 PM


bag the dawn piper?

You certainly did.


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