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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

0 posted 2004-05-06 11:37 PM

Dream me in words
simple complex
steady like the tides
I'm wild with waves unlet

underwater legs
grace in motion   bubbles
the muffled voice of fish
their lips curious   begging  troubled

I’m heading for the streaks of light
in the silver of this night
and home is spit darned to the sand
away away some other land

The singing falls in circles now
wider wider arching down
all plugged up I’m liquid rendered
tender my fins to wing this flight
I’m looking for the way that’s right

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

1 posted 2004-05-06 11:43 PM

Well, I have read this six times just now; it comes out in my head differently each times. I like it but it won't hold still for me.

*smile*

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2004-05-07 02:57 AM

nice

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

3 posted 2004-05-07 05:16 AM

Enjoyed reading...thank you..

Goldenrose.

''There is no need for temples, no need for complicated Philosophies.
My brain and my heart are my temples; my philosophy is kindness''- Dalai Lama

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-05-07 05:26 AM

Simply beautiful Martie

Mxx

What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2004-05-07 07:06 AM

The singing falls in circles now
wider wider arching down
all plugged up I’m liquid rendered
tender my fins to wing this flight
I’m looking for the way that’s right

Beautiful, Martie.....
the picture and the words.
Hugs,
Ethel

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2004-05-07 07:45 AM

I’m heading for the streaks of light
in the silver of this night
and home is spit darned to the sand
away away some other land

The singing falls in circles now
wider wider arching down
all plugged up I’m liquid rendered
tender my fins to wing this flight
I’m looking for the way that’s right
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ya had me hooked from the pic

what a very cool write...
this is a very different style for you,
abstract and alluring...as always,your gift of imagery stands out.

home is spit darned to the sand

yer so groovy.

Cant believe you need me, never thought I would be needed for anything.
Cant believe my shoulders carry such important weight as your tears.

N.F.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2004-05-07 07:49 AM

Martie
I know not of others but your writing is a delight to me.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2004-05-07 08:34 AM

I’m heading for the streaks of light
in the silver of this night
and home is spit darned to the sand
away away some other land

~*~

Liquid, indeed...
silver splendored soliloquy...

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2004-05-07 09:25 AM

Beautiful write dear Martie.
Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words,
in doing so, you touch my heart ~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

10 posted 2004-05-07 09:47 AM

tremendous write...oh I could have climbed right into that picture...lovely words which stimulate the thoughts of island paradise.

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

11 posted 2004-05-07 10:11 AM

Martie, this is the most beautiful picture. And your words go so well with it. I like the spacing for emphasis that you use in this-nicely done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

12 posted 2004-05-07 02:20 PM

This picture shows a virtual highway of light, and your poem carries us along it for as far as we are equipped to go. I think your feet are already on that road, though it's hard to see that against the brightness.

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RMW
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since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

13 posted 2004-05-07 02:45 PM

Martie. This is beautiful. Bob

GlisteningRain
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since 2004-05-06

Posts 103
The clouds

14 posted 2004-05-07 03:31 PM

"The singing falls in circles now
wider wider arching down
all plugged up I’m liquid rendered
tender my fins to wing this flight"

I have to say. This is my favorite part. I'm liquid rendered...tender. It rolled off the tongue of my mind.

sincerely,
B

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2004-05-07 04:40 PM

all plugged up I’m liquid rendered
tender my fins to wing this flight
I’m looking for the way that’s right

How very, very beautiful. *S*

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

16 posted 2004-05-10 11:18 AM

I read and I am in awe - you are something - Paul

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

17 posted 2004-05-10 09:35 PM

"I’m heading for the streaks of light
in the silver of this night
and home is spit darned to the sand
away away some other land"

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