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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2004-05-06 06:04 PM



The Inside Track


I see your life lines
and can read them boldly
sitting here in junction
as some screaming
newspaper headline
grabbing and snatching
the middle of my very soul
you somehow think the tracks
have disappeared and stopped
but the journey is not ended
the train halted to let someone else off
to the point where they needed to be
your fires cook hot – look
and iron is fixed fused to ties
that are unchangeable and unmovable
a path cut deep across the graveling
stay tight within these grooves
as you pass over the evidence
in the metal you now trace
watch closely to see the switch
where the light at the end
finds their true rails
as the engineer


© Copyright 2004 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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1 posted 2004-05-06 06:09 PM


Helen, this was a great poem!  
Opeth
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since 2001-12-13
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The Ravines
2 posted 2004-05-06 10:01 PM


I enjoyed the analogy and the images the words provided. I am still not sure exactly what you mean here, but I have some ideas. Well written.
passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-05-07 02:37 AM


yes
Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
4 posted 2004-05-07 04:26 AM


you've always been amazing..
I wanted to take the lifelines
and bend them

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