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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2004-05-06 11:26 AM



With misted eyes
I search the horizon
for glimpse of you.

I imagine your line,
the softness of your being,
the smell of your truth.

If only longing had the power
to bring you to me,
that I might taste your essence.

Yearning for your touch.
I'll not cry,
doing my best,

to save the tears
for the joy of
giving you all my love.

Whispering one last time,
I am still here, smiling
at the memories of us.

I'll try to bring you to me.
Once more,
seeing you in my dreams.

Till you find me
in yours.

Thank you Vandana!

(It wasn't my intention to use the same words in two different duets, but I loved the different flavor that came from it....)

© Copyright 2004 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-05-06 11:56 AM


I love duets! (not so much doing them but reading them)

thanks to both of you

this is a beautiful piece

iliana
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2 posted 2004-05-06 12:06 PM


Enjoyed this, you two!  
Duncan
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3 posted 2004-05-06 05:43 PM


"If only longing had the power
to bring you to me,
that I might taste your essence.

Yearning for your touch.
I'll not cry,
doing my best,

to save the tears
for the joy of
giving you all my love.

Whispering one last time,
I am still here, smiling
at the memories of us."


Great duet ya'll!!!  The flow and style work really well...  


vandana
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4 posted 2004-05-07 02:44 AM


thank you for all your replies thank you for writing with me,Susan it was a pleasure for me to write with you!!!!
Brad Majors
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5 posted 2004-05-07 12:38 PM


This is beautiful!! You are the most amazing writer!
Kaoru
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6 posted 2004-05-07 12:45 PM


And yet another!

You're killin' me here.

Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2004-05-10 11:01 AM


Thank you all...

and especially to Vandana for showing such patients with me!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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