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Edder
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0 posted 2004-05-05 08:55 PM


Hath light now fell to shadow's seep,
where ash to ash and dust do sleep
upon a bed of satin sheets--
no soul restored, nor heart replete?

Yet, as this veil of darkness falls,
hear ye not the trumpet's call?
Hope resounds from Heaven's gate
Seraphs sing and Saints await.


So lay thy weary head to rest
upon the bosom of the blest
for in the care of Angel's keep
one worries not of shadow's seep


[This message has been edited by Edder (05-07-2004 09:20 AM).]

© Copyright 2004 Edder - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 2004-05-05 08:59 PM


Edder,
I much enjoy the sentiments of this write. It's very personal.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2004-05-05 09:04 PM


WOOHOO!!!!

Finally!

You know I love it!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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3 posted 2004-05-05 09:08 PM



wonderful wonderful wonderful!
definitely worth the wait

Edder
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4 posted 2004-05-06 12:53 PM


Larry- I thank you, it was written for a very dear friend who recently lost a loved one.

Susan- are ya happy now?

Dawn- you're too sweet... thanks for reading

passing shadows
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5 posted 2004-05-06 03:05 AM


inspirational!
Lost Awhile
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6 posted 2004-05-06 04:02 AM


Nice writing. I am sure that your friend took comfort, as I did, from your words. Thank you.
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7 posted 2004-05-06 08:32 AM


Hath light now fell to shadow's seep?
Where ash to ash and dust do sleep
upon a bed of satin sheets--
no soul restored, nor heart replete.
==================================

I am so digging the assonance and alliterations...this was a treat to read aloud. Good to see you posting again poet sir.

Edder
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8 posted 2004-05-06 08:45 AM


Dixie- thank you, glad to see you here.

Lost Awhile- thank you for the kind words, i'm glad you enjoyed.

JM- Thank you so much, I strayed a bit in the second stanza, but try as I might I couldn't come up with anything better.

Snow
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9 posted 2004-05-06 02:58 PM


whispers...... you know.


thank you, biscuit
me

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

iliana
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10 posted 2004-05-06 03:11 PM


Edder, this was truly lovely!
Edder
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11 posted 2004-05-06 03:32 PM


snow- it was the least i could do. take care of yourself. (((hugs)))

iliana- my humble thanks.

suthern
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12 posted 2004-05-07 09:08 AM


How beautiful! *S* It's always a treat to read you... even if the wait is often far too long! *S*
Sunshine
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13 posted 2004-05-07 09:11 AM



My computer shows what I believe to read as Seraphims ... with a minor corruption...

nevertheless, a lovely poem...and one I would like to share with a friend.

Thank you!

Edder
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14 posted 2004-05-07 09:26 AM


Suthern- always a pleasure to have you here, dear lady.

Karilea- Thank you for the kind words and the heads up. I pasted it from Word, I think that may be the problem. I edited it and retyped it in the post box. How does it look now?

Sunshine
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15 posted 2004-05-07 11:13 AM


Much better, and my friends enjoyed it very much.  So much so, I am going to send it on a card to them to keep, now that you have made it picture perfect!
Susan Caldwell
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16 posted 2004-05-07 12:21 PM


Yep I am.

Now give something to Karilea for her show...

and for god's sake make it something you already posted or she will never get it on time....

  ya know you lovie me!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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