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Martie
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0 posted 2004-05-03 03:58 PM




In Spring, You are my Summer


I think you liked spring because it proceeded summer.
Summer when you flirted with the sun
in evenings backyard,placed like a tether to kids romping swing around,

as the coals melt color similar to the sun setting,
you and he talking quietly under the tree, and me
a driveway scatter of little girl running barefoot and unsweatered.

You wore your summer skin to softest brown
and smiled until the lines were etched into who you were.
Even on those days when I saw your down eyes,
I knew the lasting was only a small measure and would pass.
You took out the splinters with tweezers made of gold
and buried them in a place that I could not find,
not even with the measure that you gave me to keep me safe.

You planted those petunias until they became a part of you, remember?
And when spring spreads them into gardens
I see you bent over the dark earth with my legs and hips
and somehow we are melted into time that does not die
but opens like seasoning in the breeze across time,
a bloom that stays.
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reposted in memory of my mother, Marian

© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 2004-05-03 04:09 PM


This is also my father, and it was he who I envisioned as I was reading this. He loved his garden.
Very lovely poem.
abd very warming

Liz

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2 posted 2004-05-03 04:17 PM


I read the first three lines
and remembered with you...

I love your poetry, Martie.  Reposts
are fine?  But I want to hold
your book.

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"and somehow we are melted into time that does not die
but opens like seasoning in the breeze across time,
a bloom that stays."

So beautiful dear Martie..
and I have to say left me with misty eyes
remembering my own Mother.
~Soft smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

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4 posted 2004-05-03 04:56 PM


Sweet and gentle....as a mother should be....or a daughter.

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5 posted 2004-05-03 05:08 PM


so well done Martie - visions of love and memories visited my head as I read - just great - Paul
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6 posted 2004-05-03 05:10 PM


Words this beautiful are always welcome. *S* This is loving and lovely!
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7 posted 2004-05-03 05:49 PM


Sighhh Martie, this is beautiful... and I want to hold your book too.

Mxx


What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!


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8 posted 2004-05-03 06:15 PM


"I think you liked spring because it proceeded summer.
Summer when you flirted with the sun
in evenings backyard,placed like a tether to kids romping swing around"

This reminded me of so many summers in the neighborhood where I grew up, all the kids, all the Moms.  Very cool write Martie, I enjoyed it a lot...  

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9 posted 2004-05-03 11:47 PM


So pure of thought and image!
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10 posted 2004-05-04 02:09 AM


just beautiful!
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11 posted 2004-05-04 09:26 AM


You wore your summer skin to softest brown
and smiled until the lines were etched into who you were.


softly beautiful, Martie

~smiling~  as my mother
sits beside me reading
M

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12 posted 2004-05-04 11:43 AM


Martie
What can I say except, excellent.

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13 posted 2004-05-04 11:43 AM


Martie gal...you touch....

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14 posted 2004-05-04 02:46 PM


with your visions, I saw my mom to, what a lovely tribute...beautifully felt and written
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15 posted 2004-05-04 05:16 PM


as the coals melt color similar to the sun setting,
you and he talking quietly under the tree, and me
a driveway scatter of little girl running barefoot and unsweatered.

You wore your summer skin to softest brown
and smiled until the lines were etched into who you were.
=================================


you are a constant lesson in how to write imagery, personification, and expression immaculently.

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16 posted 2004-05-04 06:06 PM


This is a wonderful write, dear Martie.
... and I can relate, I have these visions of my Mother enjoying her garden, dedicating time and love.
Love, Margherita

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17 posted 2004-05-04 06:14 PM


What a warm and touching memory. Waves of nostalgia washed over me as I read your poem. ~ My grandmother and her pretty petunias! To this day, whenever I catch the scent of a petunia, I have visions of her caring for her bountiful, colorful and fragrant gardens. Thank you!

Warm hug, warm smile,
Linda

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18 posted 2004-05-04 07:25 PM


OhMartieSis~

Once more ... you touch me tender~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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19 posted 2004-05-04 10:26 PM


Martie, this was (is) a wonder!

Just Sterling! (or gold, rather)

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20 posted 2004-05-04 11:18 PM


Dearest Martie,
You and your words do your mother proud!
Lovely memories that grew....into forever!
Nicely done!
pictureme :-)

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21 posted 2004-05-05 10:04 AM


"A driveway scatter of little girl..." How wonderful, Martie. Well done. Bob
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22 posted 2004-05-05 02:37 PM


You had me at title...

Wonderful sharing of memories..

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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23 posted 2004-05-05 05:06 PM


Lovely, Martie!
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24 posted 2004-05-05 05:11 PM


Beautiful write Martie...
Martie
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25 posted 2004-05-05 07:02 PM


Thank you, friends, for your kind comments and taking the time to reply to another repost.  I appreciate it!  
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26 posted 2004-05-06 09:07 PM


Hey Martie! LOVE IT! What a great way to remember your mother. I think this is a true treasure. Poetic and refined. Beautiful piece my friend. Thank you for letting me see this.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

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