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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio

0 posted 2004-05-02 02:20 PM



Through the segue of sky
to where do you go
dear heart, as my eyes
stay eluded in their effort
to track your nightflight;

losing their easter bonnets,
the trees succumb
to the onset of darkness,
wearing now a universal color,
as the hues of the falling sun  
paint a liquid stream
through the horizons
that beckon your return,

to whom does your song
now awaken or soothe
to slumber, as a whisper
of you still remains
on the marigolds that
repose like sleepy children
on beds of anticipation,
pinning their prayers on the
returning silvergull to break
the haze of morning's uncertainty

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choshi
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since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184
New York
1 posted 2004-05-02 02:29 PM


Just beautiful!  Absolutely lovely, poignant, full..... ~P
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
2 posted 2004-05-02 05:30 PM


where do you get your inspiration?

amazing piece

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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Ohio
3 posted 2004-05-02 06:10 PM


thanks paulie
dixie: thanks girlfriend and just ask the zenman

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-05-02 06:20 PM


Wonderful!!!  Love it...much enjoyed!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
5 posted 2004-05-03 07:14 AM


Inky
Oh, I do enjoy poems with a twist of Zen...
You have captured that "twist" here..

"the trees succumb
to the onset of darkness,
wearing now a universal color,
as the hues of the falling sun  
paint a liquid stream
through the horizons
that beckon your return,"

The 'universal color" (all is everything)
and "the liquid stream" is what homogenizes that everything, that "all" (return)ing again in a cyclic fashion

And here....

"...like sleepy children
on beds of anticipation,
pinning their prayers on the
returning silvergull "

We must learn from the children to patiently await the "silvergull"

enjoyed
--------ice
  ><>

Snowflake From Hell
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since 2003-07-10
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My own little Icey Oblivion
6 posted 2004-05-03 10:13 AM


wonderful indeed

Can you hear my cries, can you hear my pleads, will you watch me burn...or would you bleed for me?

iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
7 posted 2004-05-03 11:41 AM


Zen for Zen -- beautiful!  
bklynboy
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since 2002-12-15
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florida
8 posted 2004-05-03 08:09 PM


deep......
inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
9 posted 2004-05-03 09:15 PM


thanks for stopping by
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