»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #32
»
The Sigh of Rain
| Open Poetry #32 |
|
The Sigh of Rain |
|
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
|
The Sigh of Rain I listened to the sigh of rain Drizzling on desires Bane Wetting down the wings of flight By misty dew of mornings light You could not hear the flames egress The dying moans emit distress Nor could you feel the smelt of burn Bubble under melts of yearn And from the smoke illusion rose Gasping in my egos throws Choking on the fain of blain Letting go the reins of reign And sanctity turned to splash And raindrops tore apart the ash And sun dispersed the rust to dust Diluting all the grains of lust And naught was left but rains insist Drumming on a satirist. |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You could not hear the flames egress The dying moans emit distress Nor could you feel the smelt of burn Bubble under melts of yearn And from the smoke illusion rose Gasping in my egos throws Choking on the fain of blain Letting go the reins of reign And sanctity turned to splash And raindrops tore apart the ash And sun dispersed the rust to dust Diluting all the grains of lust And naught was left but rains insist Drumming on a satirist. ========================== ok..I know its early but I'm gonna shout any way...... YOU ARE SO COOOOL!!!! This is the COOOOOLEST write!!! The internal rhymes left me giddy... reading this aloud is a MUST ... the imagery...the verbiage...the clever wit of your word play.... and this verse? And sanctity turned to splash And raindrops tore apart the ash And sun dispersed the rust to dust Diluting all the grains of lust thats worth poetic gold... I'm polishing up your crown for you are me King of Cadenced Cool Sy-babers.   *winkiewinkie*    |
||
|
GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
mmm the sigh of rain... that title is all I needed to love the poem. Then after reading the rest? I really love it! Excellent. And g'mornin to you! Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW Sy! I agree with all that JM said!! She took the words right out of my mouth...or fingertips.  Wonderful write this May Day! ~Morning hugs & tea, Nancy~
|
||
Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ While your rain was *sighing* ... mine was screaming with ZAPS!! from above! Yes, our first real 'thunder boomer' of the Florida season came down in electrified buckets~  I ran for cover ... you splashed in the ink to pen this beauty of thought~ Beautifully done, sir~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy No rain here...so thanks for this...and all that JM said is true! Hugging you! |
||
|
JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Marvelous write. Very enjoyable read! JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
||
|
Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
this is wonderful, the subtle use of rhyme, the imagery...it is a great read! I really enjoyed it! |
||
|
VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Captivating...sometimes a stretch of word-meanings to meet the rhyme, but you made me look in the dictionary.  Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
||
|
cusick Senior Member
since 2003-07-27
Posts 668 |
I love rain for a little while but living in the UK we get more than our share. It's the fresh smell that I kike best. Enjoyed reading. Maggie |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I will find you here every day, rain or shine |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
A collector's piece -- enjoyed! [This message has been edited by iliana (05-02-2004 01:41 AM).] |
||
|
Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Sir Seymour, you are amazing. And I love "The Sigh of Rain" very much. Love, Margherita |
||
|
Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
By misty dew of morning's light, while listening to the sigh of rain, Sir Sy the sonneteer, reigns with regal reins.  EA |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You could not hear the flames egress The dying moans emit distress Nor could you feel the smelt of burn Bubble under melts of yearn And from the smoke illusion rose Gasping in my egos throws Choking on the fain of blain Letting go the reins of reign ~*~ yes yes yes... |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
