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GG
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Lost in thought

0 posted 2004-04-30 11:07 PM


I remember watching
as the sun sank deeper
into the earth.

It left ebony dreams.
Nightmares.
And rain-drops
wafting through the skies.

Acquiescence then...
Resting on the lawn
with prayers
and pleas,
requests,
and "Please God...
hold his hand tonight."

Desolation covers
what he still can't call his own.
All he ever wanted
was to never be alone.

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

© Copyright 2004 GG - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-04-30 11:40 PM


OhAlyssa~
This is so gently tender ... kind, loving and caring~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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2 posted 2004-05-01 02:00 PM


you are such a beautiful person
iliana
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3 posted 2004-05-01 02:19 PM


GG, sweetie bug, you are a remarkable writer!  (He is not alone for he has a pure heart praying for him in you!) ......jo
Margherita
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4 posted 2004-05-01 07:54 PM


Alyssa, this is very beautiful.
Love, Margherita

Denise
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5 posted 2004-05-01 11:18 PM


Beautifully expressed, Alyssa!
GG
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Lost in thought
6 posted 2004-05-03 05:41 PM


Marge,
thank you so much Just too bad that all the caring in the world can't change things for him...

Dix,
takes on to know one

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

GG
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Lost in thought
7 posted 2004-05-03 05:44 PM


iliana,
thank you not so sure I am, but its great to hear... You're so sweet!

Margherita,
Thank you for your kind reply.

Denise,
Very generous of you... thank you

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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8 posted 2004-05-04 08:19 PM


GG,
   Iliana is right.  You are a remarkable writer, so full of depth and compassion. I had only one stop I could make tonight, as it is incredibly busy here.  I needed to visit to relieve May stress.   I'm glad this was the stop I made.  Just feeling the compassion you have makes me have a better attitude toward things.  Take care, Alyssa.

               Sadie

Susan
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walking the surreal
9 posted 2004-05-04 08:35 PM


Full of emotion, touching.  Enjoyed.

Susan

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10 posted 2004-05-07 02:05 PM


GG ........ This is very nicely done. Good rhythm and word selection. Very good. Bob
GG
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Lost in thought
11 posted 2004-05-10 06:00 PM


Sadie,
what an honor, to be the one stop you made. You're an incredible writer and person so to hear that from you is just awesome Thank you so much! Take care, too...

Susan,
Glad you enjoyed thank you...

Bob,
I'm very glad you think so! Thank you

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
                  Joyce kilmer

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