Not So Old - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2004-04-30 08:23 PM

Not So Old

I cannot say that I am old of heart and mind
But aged are the sparkling dreams I left behind
Those youthful visions have been carried by the streams
And rest along the banks of someone else’s dreams

I cannot say that life was so unkind or cruel
For many is the time I played a willing fool
And thus I learned how bitter are the lessons taught
And when disarmed, how futile are the battles fought

Now only memories remain of battle scars
And twinkling is the purpose of the evening stars
Though now and then in looking back on life I find
That dreams have kept me not so old of heart and mind

Elizabeth Santos
April 30, 2004

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2004-04-30 08:27 PM

Liz...you bring the wisdom of age to the wonder of youth....and together they make beauty that the young can't comprehend.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2004-04-30 08:30 PM

Though now and then in looking back on life I find
That dreams have kept me not so old of heart and mind

So true for me, too, Liz.
I sure am glad to see you posting more.
I love to read your poetry.

Hugs,
Ethel

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2004-04-30 08:42 PM

You still live your dreams, Lizzy - and you inspire me...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2004-04-30 08:56 PM

Elizabeth
You have touched me with this one.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-04-30 09:06 PM

Dear Elizabeth...this was beautifully written and deeply felt.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

6 posted 2004-04-30 09:51 PM

Those youthful visions have been carried by the streams
And rest along the banks of someone else’s dreams

I love these phrases. Hopfully new visions flow down the stream into our waiting hearts.

Susan

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

7 posted 2004-04-30 10:31 PM

Beautiful expression, Elizabeth! It's those dreams that keep us young!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-05-01 03:56 AM

lovely write

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

9 posted 2004-05-01 05:40 AM

Elizabeth
You have revealed (here in this poem) the importance of beauty that is more than surfactant. That is very important (to me). The beauty of wisdom and memory, this proves that you are "not so old"

I believe Whitman also thought this way...

*"Women sit, or move to and fro—some older, some young;
The young are beautiful—but the older are more beautiful than the young."

I just love your end stanza....

"Now only memories remain of battle scars
And twinkling is the purpose of the evening stars
Though now and then in looking back on life I find
That dreams have kept me not so old of heart and mind"

excellent poetry, enjoyed
---------ice
><>

*Walt Whitman - Beautiful Women. (Leaves Of Grass)

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

10 posted 2004-05-02 08:41 PM

This touched my thoughts in many ways. Thank you for sharing it.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2004-05-03 01:02 AM

Nice thoughts...I often thing of mistakes I have made...but I have come to realize that this is who I am...I want to live the experience...James

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

12 posted 2004-05-03 01:19 AM

I'd say you are one pretty hip chick! Yes I would indeed

Dream on Lizzie, dream on.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

13 posted 2004-05-03 11:43 AM

yep. I agree.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

14 posted 2004-05-03 12:22 PM

Thank you all for your kind remarks. This was written as a challenge to myself, to write 3 verses in the meter of the first line. Nan can tell us what it is. It was a little difficult to stick with it and many times I was counting fingers
Thank you again
Liz

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.