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Martie
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0 posted 2004-04-30 05:21 PM




A Stream called Noname

Still the loud sky sings
to the grass awakening
with dandelions.

She came from a spring house,
pure and clear and deep,
falling sweet voiced into a stream
with no name.
I know, for a pond is in her eyes
softened by moss, the deep of them
in spring awakens, sighs.




The woods have called her
back along the wagon trail of summer,
where in giggle of youth she ran,
a crystal darting across the roots of trees
to dig the secret of bones on knees
with strength of little rocks and sticks,
an old cemetery she found was full of tricks.

Her struggle absorbed the sun
and dusk gathered in the oaks
no longer rustling glee of tune
but somber crunch of leaves and things.
Could be she opened shift of time and dread
to find, not understanding but the gore of death instead?

Then to run with trip, the trail unseen,
the deep impression of the wheels
had gone with light it seems,
and something crashes through the night
pursuant, a demon carves her fright.

It’s long now,
the way she came had seemed so small
and now great distance makes her call
for the magic warmth of windows
and her father’s arms;
so steady she can feel them reach towards place
to still the tears now trembling on her face.

Like locust a buzz is singing in the copse
frozen now she stops to listen   find
a scoop of the familiar lullaby
her mother’s call, catching the singing rocks
and she to follow
until within those arms she docks.

Still the loud sky sings
to the grass awakening
with dandelions.



© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-04-30 05:24 PM


Martie....how wonderful. I especially like the second verse. Bob
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2 posted 2004-04-30 05:27 PM


Martie - this is just so very good and I am sure Liz will just love it - I know I did - Paul
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3 posted 2004-04-30 05:29 PM


this is gorgeous! so well done! what a beautiful gift!
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4 posted 2004-04-30 07:06 PM


Psst....Martie....your grace is showing....and it is beautiful.

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5 posted 2004-04-30 07:16 PM


Liz told me this story of her childhood summer home...and we were there...the photos are like it was, but changed of course.  A touching time for her and for me to see the place my dear friend loved so much.
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6 posted 2004-04-30 10:17 PM


Martie,
This is magnificent! I must explain to all that while my poet friends were visiting me, we turned off a country road and into the woods to the clearing where we found the country home of my childhood. It was here that I came face to face with nature, which enthralled me as a child and whidh is the subject of so much of my poetry. THere is a natural spring that gurgles out of the earth at the foot of the wooded hillside, which I had dubbed "the little brook with no name". At the end of a path word by wagon wheels a century ago is Ebenezer Church, which was the scene of a childhood caper, of grave
digging effort which led to a frightful walk through dark woods to find our way back home. All of these stories were so intently absorbed by a poetees who now presents them in such a delightful way, in her classic style of words and phrases that trip over the page like a cold brook over rocks.
Thank you, dear sweet Martie for this wonderful keepsake which I will surely share with my soulmate sister, Margaret. She will love it as much as I do.
Thank you, thank you, thank you
LOvin hugs
Liz

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7 posted 2004-04-30 10:30 PM


The pictures turned out great, Martie, and your poem is wonderful! It captures Liz's sharing of her memories perfectly!  
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8 posted 2004-04-30 10:36 PM


Martie..dear Martie..you have outdone yourself here.
How tenderly you tell this story...
and look how pleased Elizabeth is!
This one my dear brought tears as I read..
Wonderful...magical.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

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9 posted 2004-04-30 11:29 PM


Martie, this is absolutely magnificent. What a beautiful gift. Thank you so much for sharing it with us.

I'm keeping it too.

Mxx

What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!


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10 posted 2004-05-01 12:00 PM


OhMartieSIS~

'She came from a spring house,
pure and clear and deep,
falling sweet voiced into a stream
with no name.
I know, for a pond is in her eyes
softened by moss, the deep of them
in spring awakens, sighs.'


This is pure gold ... totally fascinating the way you hear a heart sing~

OhLizzyLady~
I can feel the joy leap from the page~
Beautiful pathway of remember~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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11 posted 2004-05-01 06:06 AM


Applause....for both poem and picture...
enjoyed
-------ice
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12 posted 2004-05-01 08:10 AM


What a wonderful, magical place to grow up...
I love that the visit inspired so much in one another...this is a lovely sharing.

(and you know I wanna see more pics)

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13 posted 2004-05-02 05:55 PM


Martie,
  Your imagery and talent for graceful writing overwhelms me!  I enjoyed this very much.  Thanks.  I'm sure she will enjoy this.
           Sadie

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14 posted 2004-05-03 01:12 PM


Thank you for taking us to this special place... where poetry was born for one is dear to all our hearts. *S*
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15 posted 2004-05-03 01:22 PM


I went back into the archives and found this little poem posted on 12/5/1999, one of the very first poems I ever wrote. The babbling brook keeps better time than does my meter,

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The Little Brook

From hillside spring to lake below
The waters dance and lightly flow
The same degree in every season
God pours his font with special reason

Sweet little stream, so diamond clear
Babbling songs for bird to hear
Jumps o're stones and rounds the bends
Its way through wooded hills it wends

Fresh from ground, the virgin flow
Carves a maze in wintry snow
But May with floral hues erupts
And laces it with buttercups

I sat beside her many a day
And whiled my youthful hours away
Cold, cold waters soothed my feet
In summer's overbearing heat

I wasted not one moment spent
Beside the waters which came and went
For memories of the stream remain
The babbling brook that has no name

Elizabeth Santos

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16 posted 2004-05-03 01:32 PM



I love tributes...
and there is something about this
that will sing
for years to come.

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17 posted 2004-05-03 11:49 PM


"I know, for a pond is in her eyes
softened by moss, the deep of them
in spring awakens, sighs."

This is very accurate!!!

A wonderful tribute to a kind and generous lady.

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