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Your Rose |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Beautiful rain, In my eyes. Rain on me Saturate me with sound. Sky awash with silence, Crashing, cacophanous noiselessness, The clouds of yesterday passing through. Memories running down my cheeks. You were there, Dressed as an angel. On your jerky frame were gossamer wings, Fanning my conscience with possibility. A butterfly passing through, I was a radiant flower. You sipped my nectar and were gone. Now the rain batters my eyes, my lips, my nose, You forgot responsability for your rose. "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake [This message has been edited by ESP (04-30-2004 05:46 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OhLilLizzie~ 'A butterfly passing through, I was a radiant flower. You sipped my nectar and were gone.' How can something so sad ... be SO beautiful? And yet ... it is~ Love you gal~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Perfectly penned. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
heartfelt write...very touching and sad |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Thank you everyone for your kind replies...thank you for taking the time to read  Liz xx "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
ESP, this needs to be bumped up to the top because it is really good and I hope others see it! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"The clouds of yesterday passing through. Memories running down my cheeks." "You were there, Dressed as an angel. On your jerky frame were gossamer wings, Fanning my conscience with possibility." The phrasing in this is absolutely wonderful Lizzie, and the visuals are stunning ... such a beautiful read. I really enjoyed this. So good to see you, too! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
There you were, like a flower and here comes the butterfly to taste your nectar and leave... I like the analogy, a lot. enjoyed! |
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Evi Junior Member
since 2004-04-10
Posts 18 |
Lovely. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Wow, can't believe it got more replies...after the last lot, I thought it was consigned to poetry history Thanks alot everyone, Good to see familiar faces and new ones Immer love, Lizzie xx "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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