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exhale
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0 posted 2004-04-30 12:24 PM


written in my mind are the words,
i told you so..over and over
i should have listened to my gut
tears blurring my eyes
my thoughts
like fog.

whisper your sweet words of revenge
as you glare into my soul
like you want a peice of me..
but baby,you already have everything.

hold her like a cello,play her like a fool
been there,done that
thanks for nothing.


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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2004-04-30 12:45 PM


Chelsea~
This is an intense read~

Loved the title ...~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2004-04-30 03:50 AM


but at least you'll be smarter next time?
dingusjr
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3 posted 2004-04-30 04:09 AM


Hold her like a cello...but pluck her heart strings.  I like this...very nice.
LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-04-30 06:56 AM


very good analogy...I like your style...very good read
Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2004-04-30 09:26 AM




I understand.  Wonderfully worded.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2004-05-01 12:56 PM


Like this...James
INclan
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7 posted 2004-05-01 08:39 AM


hold her like a cello,play her like a fool
been there,done that
thanks for nothing.


OUCH!  I was thinking along other line when I opened this poem and therefore surprised.

Well written

INclan

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Canada eh.
8 posted 2004-05-01 09:17 AM


Oooh I love this...wonerful!!
Hugs~


~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

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