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swatcatpettus
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0 posted 2004-04-29 06:54 PM


Its a great day to die,
No one around to stop me
No one around to save me from myself
Its a great day to die,
No one around to fix my broken state of mind
This broken state of mind


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-29-2004 11:21 PM).]

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Startime55
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1 posted 2004-04-29 06:55 PM


This poem is filled with such incredible pain you may miss the loving concern that may be close by.

INclan
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2 posted 2004-04-29 07:42 PM


A very interesting poem.  I am curious as to it's origins.  How did you arrive at this creation?

INclan

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3 posted 2004-04-29 10:51 PM


eek... I can feel the pain coming from the poem. Never-the-less, well written.
swatcatpettus
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4 posted 2004-04-30 12:23 PM


darn you Admins, y cant you have just left the title

[This message has been edited by Ron (04-30-2004 01:52 AM).]

Ron
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5 posted 2004-04-30 01:53 AM


The title was edited because it was vulgar. If you feel your work has no meaning beyond the vulgarity, I suggest you find a different place to post it.
swatcatpettus
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6 posted 2004-05-04 12:56 PM


Ron, I dont think the title to my poem was vulgar at all, if in fact I would have used the whole word, then yes, it could be considered vulgar, but the way I title my poems, or to emphasize that, the way I express my feelings, shouldnt be edited.  
Ron
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7 posted 2004-05-04 04:56 PM


Letters are simply symbols from which we derive meaning. Using different symbols to arrive at the same exact meaning is still just as vulgar. Had you disguised the meaning sufficiently we would have had no reason to edit and you would have no reason to care we edited. It would have just been random letters.

How you express your feeling in your home is entirely up to you. How you express them is our home, however, will be edited as necessary. If you're uncomfortable with that, it should only serve to make you more aware of *our* discomfort with senseless cliché and meaningless foul language.

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