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Soft Petals Landing

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In Your Poetic Mind


0 posted 04-29-2004 05:02 PM       View Profile for Greeneyes   Email Greeneyes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Greeneyes


You are the song inside my soul
when I awake from quiet river

before me I see:

A world in  motion  
beautiful under snow
for a moment you entered
the naked soul running

it was more then that:

stars had fallen
separating black&light

I laid my head back down
sleeping in a dream to watch

The moon rise again
with her pale innocence
soft strokes in a whisper of mercy
searching for the lost

Tonight, I wish I could
bring down the stars-- for you to touch
sounds of melody
wandering down as they do
soft petals landing

Tonight, I might  escape to the waters
with his  shadow of guitar
filling  nights sky
with  flesh of his fingers

A journey of light rain -- in rebirth
tracing patterns along bare hills

His storm brought me to this:

deepening the river of night
up to the edge of everything

~~



~~**~~
The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you
~~**~~
© Copyright 2004 Lauren~ - All Rights Reserved
JL
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1 posted 04-29-2004 06:27 PM       View Profile for JL   Email JL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JL

Wow… too good for words.  Excellent!
JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”
JL

Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


2 posted 04-29-2004 06:32 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

As always Lauren...Exquisite!!
Love ya pretty lady~


~I love you - those three words have my life in them.~

Startime55
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3 posted 04-29-2004 07:03 PM       View Profile for Startime55   Email Startime55   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Startime55

The beauty of your words shine like the flame of a full moon....
Opeth
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The Ravines


4 posted 04-29-2004 07:13 PM       View Profile for Opeth   Email Opeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Opeth

"Tonight, I wish I could
bring down the stars-- for you to touch
sounds of melody
wandering down as they do
soft petals landing

Tonight, I might  escape to the waters
with his  shadow of guitar
filling  nights sky
with  flesh of his fingers"


~ [double]sigh... Your writings never cease to please me. I loved this part, especially. Pure writing perfection.


Goodknight
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5 posted 04-29-2004 10:49 PM       View Profile for Goodknight   Email Goodknight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Goodknight

the images of your poetry engulfs me and I reread them over and over and enjoy it all so very much - thanks - Paul
Janet Marie
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6 posted 04-30-2004 07:53 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

The moon rise again
with her pale innocence
soft strokes in a whisper of mercy
searching for the lost

Tonight, I wish I could
bring down the stars-- for you to touch
sounds of melody
wandering down as they do
soft petals landing

Tonight, I might  escape to the waters
with his  shadow of guitar
filling  nights sky
with  flesh of his fingers

A journey of light rain -- in rebirth
tracing patterns along bare hills

His storm brought me to this:

deepening the river of night
up to the edge of everything

==================================

Lordy girlie...ya make it hard to pick fave lines in this one...the imagery is stunning..the ethereal essence of it is exquisite...the personifications make it hauntingly beautiful, blended toether it becomes pure poetic seduction at its most lovely.  Lauren...your muse and pen is enchanting.

The ink bleeds through cuz you're paper thin
you're one more fool with a paper and pen
lookin for a poem in the water stains on the floor.

R.B.

Susan Caldwell
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since 12-27-2002
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Florida


7 posted 04-30-2004 09:38 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

I could sit down with a book of just your writings and be content for hours...

You are truly an amazing writer.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

passing shadows
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displaced


8 posted 04-30-2004 11:44 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

and what a storm it must have been
Janet Marie
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peppermint35
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since 05-28-2000
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Texas, USA


10 posted 10-23-2004 08:25 AM       View Profile for peppermint35   Email peppermint35   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for peppermint35

Truly beautiful... any other words fail me..

Pepper
"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

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