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JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA

0 posted 2004-04-28 03:35 PM



Symmetric Poetry

Gently sloping off the edge of night, the horizon slips into space,
where that edge goes, is indeed darkness’s lifeless face.
That horizon bends upward, and somewhere to join in with all the stars,
while collecting shreds of moonlight and stardust dancing afar.  

Where there is no time for the clouds, and seasons all but fail.
Where streaks of lightning poke and prod at passing comet tails.
Where colors are vacant, if the light does not intercede.
Where sound is a color, and whispered in a song, as far as the eye can see.

Yet, it all has movement, and in a place that it must be, painted on life’s canvas
like us all, deep in symmetric poetry…

We are shackled by the moods of Meroe’s earthly queens, Candace, the like which has yet to be seen…


© Copyright 2004 JL - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-04-28 03:42 PM


DELTA...OLD KINGDOM'S PURE PAINTING....ALAS
AND FOREVER MORE!

  

JL, this was immense beauty!  very much enjoyed...
Have a great evening...

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2004-04-28 04:04 PM


You are inspired today Poet.
Awesome!
TD

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

3 posted 2004-06-03 11:47 PM


very nice...extremely well done...loved the stanza

"Where there is no time for the clouds, and seasons all but fail.
Where streaks of lightning poke and prod at passing comet tails.
Where colors are vacant, if the light does not intercede.
Where sound is a color, and whispered in a song, as far as the eye can see."

you have melded emotions so well in this one...they interact and intertwine with such finesse

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
4 posted 2004-06-04 12:34 PM


Awesome and inspired, JL!     ...jo
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