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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2004-04-28 01:48 PM


winds shift,
i catch their scent
stalking the grass subconscious

a target of infected thought
i find myself enclined
                     some days,

to let them all
devour me.


*rewrite(needs work) of an older poem titled prey

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Enchantress
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1 posted 2004-04-28 01:53 PM


Ooooh love the thoughts here Raph!!
Good stuff.
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Sunshine
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2 posted 2004-04-28 02:41 PM



Made ME see bugs and such...
I like this, Raph!

icebox
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in the shadows
3 posted 2004-04-28 04:34 PM


I have seen awareness, and acceptance...perhaps fulfillment, in the eyes of prey taken from a distance...as if in the moment just before the moment, they knew.

This topic is worth exploring more, and you are off to a great start.  

Thank you for the raw honesty of it.

Dark Angel
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4 posted 2004-04-28 04:52 PM


Oooh Raph, I lerrrve this one

and I'm going to keep it Bello.

Mxx

What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!


serenity blaze
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5 posted 2004-04-28 06:38 PM


"stalking the grass subconscious"

now that's a poem all by itself...I can understand the inclination to just leave it that, but I'd love to see this unwound too.

Hugs.

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
6 posted 2004-04-28 10:54 PM


Pull A string, A Puppet moves

Charles Bukowski

each man must realize
that it can all disappear very
quickly:
the cat, the woman, the job,
the front tire,
the bed, the walls, the
room; all our necessities
including love,
rest on foundations of sand -
and any given cause,
no matter how unrelated:
the death of a boy in Hong Kong
or a blizzard in Omaha ...
can serve as your undoing.
all your chinaware crashing to the
kitchen floor, your girl will enter
and you'll be standing, drunk,
in the center of it and she'll ask:
my god, what's the matter?
and you'll answer: I don't know,
I don't know ...


*far superior than any words i could muster or expand upon

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2004-04-28 11:46 PM


Indeed, Raph...

Fair enuff.


Kaoru
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8 posted 2004-04-29 12:20 PM


sometimes, you hurt my brain,
but
I like it,
ya know?

passing shadows
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displaced
9 posted 2004-04-29 03:18 AM


yeah...me too
Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2004-04-29 10:56 AM


"infected thought....


let them all...

devour me."


And sometimes I do...

We are all fellable...

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
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11 posted 2004-04-29 12:25 PM


you have given today, much to ponder in your words...wise words to say the least...very much enjoyed!  Thank you for sharing
Martie
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12 posted 2004-04-29 12:29 PM


Thank you, Raph...and Bukowski for the inspiration.

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