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wranx
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0 posted 2004-04-28 12:20 PM



I believe, as Brautigan did
That every woman
Should have a poem written for her

Be it an erotic Haiku
Or a schoolyard ditty
Of roses red and blue violets

A woman should have words to wear
High on her thigh like a garter
Or cape-like, across her shoulders

All women should be honored so
Whether a pastoral sonnet
Or an ode to the lights in her eyes

A man needs to craft for a woman
A jeweled verse that she could cherish
And keep, for her own

So, I recall the women in my own life
The poems that I’ve written for them
And how most have wandered away

To other futures, other lovers
Long before
I discovered this penchant to write

And hope that the effort
However belated
Still counts for something

But, what of the girl
Who decades ago
Roamed the streets with her father

From bar to bar
Where he peddled her freshness
Until she bore him a daughter

Who's words warm her shoulders
And does she wear a verse of jewels
Who wrote for this girl

Her poem?


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passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-04-28 02:39 AM


very touching piece
Margherita
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2 posted 2004-04-28 04:36 AM


Very beautiful and very touching.
May that child sing of love to her mother!
Love, Margherita

dingusjr
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3 posted 2004-04-28 04:53 AM


Yes, every woman should have a poem.
And it is great to see another Richard
Brautigan fan here!

Beki
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4 posted 2004-04-28 05:28 AM


Brautigan's name in the title drew me in and boy did this poem deliver -- very very good
nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2004-04-28 06:21 AM


"A woman should have words to wear"


shows the warmth you have and the man you are

a much appreciated write, Ed

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Sunshine
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6 posted 2004-04-28 06:26 AM


You take a coin
and polish
both sides.

As always...
thank you.

Susan Caldwell
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7 posted 2004-04-28 08:39 AM


I agree Ed.  

I think the men of pip should pick a female pipster and go to work!  LOL..

Wonderfully written.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2004-04-28 08:45 AM


wranx,
You have turned a cutting knife into a butter knife, enjoyed.

icebox
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9 posted 2004-04-28 02:12 PM


"Who's words warm her shoulders
And does she wear a verse of jewels
Who wrote for this girl

Her poem?"

The poem is always written in the heart, reflecting out and can only be viewed and captured by another.  

If it is never captured, it does not die, it escapes to be as a wild elemental.

Beautiful work, Sir poet.  Thank you for sharing it.

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10 posted 2004-04-28 03:00 PM


I would say she writes her own and those with good hearts will read it all to well.  Hey Yeti, well done, liked it.
Corinne
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11 posted 2004-04-28 05:27 PM


Ed,

Here's hoping someone did write her a poem.

Very sweet, this.

Corinne

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12 posted 2004-04-28 06:27 PM


I agree too.

Um.

Where's mine?


Martie
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13 posted 2004-04-29 10:42 AM


You touched me with your poem, ...thank you!
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14 posted 2004-04-29 10:50 AM


*shivers* sent through me...
incredible, im awestruck again

Beki
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15 posted 2004-04-30 02:48 AM


I'm with thosewho think the menof PIP should pick a woman of PIP and go to work
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