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forne_marin
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0 posted 2004-04-27 05:15 PM


ELSINORE


Old houses have the best sounds.
They creak and groan.
They whistle and complain.
They make no concessions for those inhabitants
   Who live therein.
--If they want to make noise-so be it.
New houses stifle.

New houses try to cover noises up.
   They are sterile and acquiescing.
New houses don't intrude.
   They don't bring attention to themselves.
One would think they didn't need attention.

Old houses echo and amplify the life in them.
Old houses have creaks in
                                         special places.
Old houses have frequent predictable ailments.
Old houses are like family.

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I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

© Copyright 2004 Jonathan Long - All Rights Reserved
Effigy
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1 posted 2004-04-27 05:44 PM


You know, I believe you are right. Old houses have a sort of attitude.  Although my house is only 5 years old (surly still considered a mear child) and it makes quite a few noises from time to time also.  Oh well.  OVer all I liked the poem.
Margherita
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2 posted 2004-04-27 06:13 PM


You are right.
Old houses are heavy with history of lives lived and so they are actually ALIVE too.
Beautiful thoughts.
Love, Margherita

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3 posted 2004-04-28 11:52 PM


Old houses have creaks in
                                         special places

~~~~~~

indeed wonderful write!

~~**~~
The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you
~~**~~

iliana
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4 posted 2004-04-29 01:56 AM


Very good write!
passing shadows
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5 posted 2004-04-29 03:10 AM


true...true

well put!

Sunshine
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6 posted 2004-04-29 06:37 AM


Old houses echo and amplify the life in them.
Old houses have creaks in
                                         special places.
Old houses have frequent predictable ailments.
Old houses are like family.

~*~

JUST like family, exactly!
Enjoyed!

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