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PKreturns
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0 posted 2004-04-27 09:39 AM


She is an enigma to everyone
A dark cloud under the sun
Shadows are more easily held
And ghosts are more often felt
Than her whom I begin to deem
Is maybe nothing but a dream
She is a question upon my lips
Breathed in low, moaning sips
As I experience the unreal
Yet how is it that I can feel
Her in all my waking thoughts
And not the sleep for so long fought
She is the voice inside my head
The tug on soul upon which I’m led
Like a fish in the proverbial net
Ensnared, but far from death yet
Her in my mind I can plainly see
Though she remains always, a mystery



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Snowflake From Hell
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1 posted 2004-04-27 09:40 AM


seems to be everyones Unicorn these days..nicely done

Can you hear my cries, can you hear my pleads, will you watch me burn...or would you bleed for me?

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
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2 posted 2004-04-27 09:47 AM


What wonderful expressions of the watery state of elusive and want.
You write so very well.
TD

Sunshine
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3 posted 2004-04-27 09:49 AM



Oh, she sounds quite mysterious!
A lovely read, this one.

nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2004-04-27 09:53 AM


She is a question upon my lips...

a wonderful line *s
M

LeeJ
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5 posted 2004-04-27 10:18 AM


ahhhh huh, that's it, you've got it bad, that my friend, is the LOVE WORD.

In answer to your question on my poem, wrote it last year...I think?  

Enjoy reading you, filled with mystery, curiosity and emphatic belief

Good Morning

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6 posted 2004-04-27 01:46 PM


"And ghosts are more often felt
Than her whom I begin to deem
Is maybe nothing but a dream
She is a question upon my lips
Breathed in low, moaning sips
As I experience the unreal
Yet how is it that I can feel
Her in all my waking thoughts
And not the sleep for so long fought
She is the voice inside my head
The tug on soul upon which I’m led"


I know, it's almost the whole poem, but this is the part I liked the best....
awesome awesome write

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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7 posted 2004-04-27 01:51 PM


"She is the voice inside my head
The tug on soul upon which I’m led"

Yes, my "she" is always tugging on me...

She doesn't let me have much fun!

  enjoyed.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Corinne
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state of confusion
8 posted 2004-04-27 01:55 PM


A lovely write. Sometimes, she's best kept a mystery.


Corinne

INclan
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9 posted 2004-04-27 02:00 PM


Very well done.  She does indeed walk in beauty like the night.....

INclan

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