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Beki
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Newport Beach, CA, USA

0 posted 2004-04-26 04:55 AM



Perpetual Moths

How oddly appropriate it seems
that you chose Autumn
with its crisp change of dress
and brisk blue air
to come back into my life.

20 autumns have come and gone
since last I heard from you,
yet speaking with you now
feels as comfortable as slipping
into a worn winter sweater.

There is no awkwardness one might expect
after so many years of silence;
no quiet hesitation,
no shy reserve to stop my words
that still seem to delight you.

We who knew each other well
are no less familiar now;
you recognize the subtle change
my breathing makes when I blush
while I still listen past your inuendo.

Perhaps what has surprised me most
after all the twists and turns
our lives have taken, after
all the miles and circumstances
that have grown like oceans between us,

We are still drawn invariably together.
Like those perpetual moths
to that eternally damning flame,
we cannot seem to break
our fascination with each other.

Long ago I promised myself
I would never be vulnerable to you again,
but when I hear you smiling
on the other end of the phone
I feel my resolve begin to melt.

I can't resist the sound of your voice-
no matter how changed or far away,
it still can stop my heart mid-beat.
And when I finally catch my breath,
I know it will always be that way.

So now it has come to this;
stolen moments on the phone,
hours given over to giving in
while a good safe distance apart.
We're only talking, after all....

But what if the distance wasn't safe?
How committed would we be,
each to our own lives?
Would we cross that ocean
of time and circumstance

into each other's arms again?


10/7/03


© Copyright 2004 Rebecca Reese - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
1 posted 2004-04-26 05:00 AM


this one hits close to home...very close
inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
2 posted 2004-04-26 07:19 AM


would we?
could we?
should we?
if you dont want to wonder, stop it right now, just my humble opinion
nicely done poetry; it flowed in its verse

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2004-04-26 08:35 AM


We who knew each other well
are no less familiar now;
you recognize the subtle change
my breathing makes when I blush
while I still listen past your inuendo.

Perhaps what has surprised me most
after all the twists and turns
our lives have taken, after
all the miles and circumstances
that have grown like oceans between us,

We are still drawn invariably together.
Like those perpetual moths
to that eternally damning flame,
we cannot seem to break
our fascination with each other.

Long ago I promised myself
I would never be vulnerable to you again,
but when I hear you smiling
on the other end of the phone
I feel my resolve begin to melt.

I can't resist the sound of your voice-
no matter how changed or far away,
it still can stop my heart mid-beat.
And when I finally catch my breath,
I know it will always be that way.


So now it has come to this;
stolen moments on the phone,
hours given over to giving in

===============================


you have written a mirror of poetry...
Long ago, Sunshine dubbed me the "queen moth"...
you had me from the title on.  


you recognize the subtle change
my breathing makes when I blush
while I still listen past your inuendo.



I just loved those lines of personification.
exceptional write of expression and confession.



... and it's you ... you ... you ... you ...
the light changes when you're in the room.

M.B.

Grover
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since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
4 posted 2004-04-26 09:24 AM


Very nice.
jennirey
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since 2002-01-24
Posts 198
North Richland HillsTx
5 posted 2004-04-26 05:32 PM


So Close to home here too. I want to save this one if I might. Lots of good feeling stuff here.

"We are still drawn invariably together.
Like those perpetual moths
to that eternally damning flame,
we cannot seem to break
our fascination with each other.

Long ago I promised myself
I would never be vulnerable to you again,
but when I hear you smiling
on the other end of the phone
I feel my resolve begin to melt.

I can't resist the sound of your voice-
no matter how changed or far away,
it still can stop my heart mid-beat.
And when I finally catch my breath,
I know it will always be that way"

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113
Canada eh.
6 posted 2004-04-26 06:16 PM


Fantastic write...very much enjoyed.
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
7 posted 2004-04-26 06:27 PM


Ah Beki...I'm liking this...
it speaks of ever time
and mates with soul...

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
8 posted 2004-04-26 09:24 PM


Beautiful write...often, as I've aged, wondered (dreamed some too) what it would be like to run into my high school sweetheart. I guess we all do at some time or other. Maybe it could be like this (but I'm a married man so - no, it couldn't - I wouldn't let it).  But still one has to wonder...

great piece, my friend.

jwesley

Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
9 posted 2004-04-26 10:50 PM


I really liked this, it drew me in right away.  Strong, emotional writing.  Well done!

~*Krista Lee Knutson*~

Let your life lightly dance on the edges of time like dew on the tip of a leaf.
~Rabindranath Tagore


garysgirl
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10 posted 2004-04-26 11:15 PM


I love this, Beki and this part.......
but when I hear you smiling
on the other end of the phone


is so true...I can hear my Honey_love smile over the phone.
And this part I really relate to, also......

I can't resist the sound of your voice-
no matter how changed or far away,
it still can stop my heart mid-beat.
And when I finally catch my breath,
I know it will always be that way.

I'm so glad that you decided to come back, Beki.  
Hugs,
Ethel


Beki
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA
11 posted 2004-04-27 01:25 AM


This is the first poem I wrote when my high school/college sweetheart came back into my life last summer - he has been a steady stream of inspiration since. I have not seen him yet, we live 1500 miles apart but we have plans to meet for a few days this summer and I can't wait to see what poety comes out of that.

Thank you all for reading and foryour warm welcome back.....I think I will be staying awhile

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

12 posted 2004-04-27 05:15 PM


How oddly appropriate it seems
that you chose Autumn
with its crisp change of dress
and brisk blue air
to come back into my life.


Love the opening lines

What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!


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