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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
(Have you ever written, proofed, posted, and then wished you could remove a poem totally? The difficulty in doing so is that a blank box remains) Blank it Blank-it my poemless write Cover the space of blue With words peeling from my soul Revealing tension held. Many times words are deleted in apprehension that they've given too broad of clue as to self, past,wants desires So again in this box I remove the glue I wish those words would lead to burning coal mines underground; There, fallen words easily torched Left no longer seed [This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-26-2004 07:25 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...many times |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yep! Like the way you've made this so intense! Eric |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
It's really strange how sometimes we can't tolerate what came out of our pen ... and still I believe there is a reason to everything. So why delete what yearned to be shared? If we can't seem to identify fully ... there might be someone who can. Trust. Enjoyed your reasoning. Love, Margherita  |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Margherita, Sometimes it's just plain bad! Take my Bic for instance, I found I written a not-so-clean poem (that's not at all like me! It was an accident). Then I edited it a few times, watering it down each time. I would have preferred deletion. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
BWAAA-HA-HA-HA-HA-HA-HA-HA-HA-HA-HA!!!!! Boy have I ever! This is hair-raisingly familiar, and you captured it so well! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
RatL. Thanks for your response. I couldn't tell you'd suffered from the blank-it blues from your writes; they seem like perfection. Sadie |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Oh yes, I hear you... but at least we can edit, whereas you can't take back something you "recite." |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
You've got that right! I should just provide for margin of error by having a replacement poem in my back pocket just in case! I'm thankful Piptalk is so user friendly, allowing us to make on the spot revisions! I love this place... [This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-25-2004 11:25 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, yes indeedy! Not only did I identify with your words, but I also identified with the words of your readers! But to paraphrase what Margherita wrote, there truly is a reason for everything and what you have written may just be what someone else needed to read! I'll keep that thought! It certainly makes me feel better! lol  To poetry helping people!  Linda |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Earth Angel, Maybe... i'll try to grin that in mind. Thanks. Sadie |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Hee Hee...Oh BLank it is right...but there are many times when I have done just that....say in a word document...and then later thought...hey...that wasn't bad! (Only to find the entire thought totally lost.) Oh Blank it...hee I go rambling even in a reply when all I really mean to say is Good Write! Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sadie: For bettre or worse, I find that the pure intent flows first...and that belongs to the author. The reader will draw their own conclusions, no matter how many edits are made...and that is the magic of poetry. People will draw out what they need from the pure intention. You know, this was brilliant. There is no chance that you could ever have a dirty write... Excellent. TD |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
azblond, Hey, i'm glad to hear of your blank-its and those of others. It's nice to know that others find themselves in the same boat at times (as long as it doesn't sink)! Thank you for your welcome comment. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
TD, You're right, but I'm too set in my ways. I try to pour out what I want the reader to know and understand, not taking into consideration of what you have so well presented. (Not such a brilliant write unless the brilliance comes from the embering coal!) I do appreciate your opinion, but I still have my inhibitions. Thank you so much for your kind words. Sadie |
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Bonnie j Senior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 1588Ohio |
I'm not the swearing kind, but sometimes I get so angry. If......I spilled my thoughts for real. OH! MY!GOSH! What a foul mouth little biddy I would be.But as you say water it down. LOL. By the time I redo it doesn't sound so angry and ticked or as sad and painful as I feel.Good one.... Hugs Bon-Bon  |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sadie, this is a very good poem. I think we all may have done this before, or thought of doing it anyway.  and  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, and now you know why sometimes my title doesn't tell what the write is really about....I've blanked a few times myself, and it's a good thing, to save a poofer the dirty deed.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Better to blank it than not to blank at all like me lately. Enjoyed! |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Bonnie J.,I don't care for swear words either. I tried to play on words when I used blank-it as a cover-up.(Usually, I don't let the other words slip into my thoughts or from my mouth. But there are those times when one could just kick oneself, so the title suits either way.) Your poems always leave me with a good feeling even though pain was evident.(Sometimes the beauty is in the cover-up. For example, my father walked for years with a limp. He wore a smile through his pain so that others would feel better.My remembrance is of the attitude, not so much gritting teeth pain. I see this in your work. It is often light, but contains the pain. It is your positive attitude I rememberThank you for your reflective comments. Sadie~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Garys Girl, You are too kind, Ethel. You are such a special lady, always sharing your warmth. Thank you. It is good to read your thoughts again. Your writing has really developed during the time I've been here. I really like it! You're doing a great job. Sadie Midnitesun, Ah, another technique-keep the title and just rewrite the poem. I've tried doing that, but sometimes it's so bad I have to scratch everything, including the title! Then to scratch the scratch-that's a treat! I would never have guessed your titles didn't blend in with your poems. You're pretty clever, Lady! Sadie iliana, I'm glad to see another excellent post coming from Texas. You do your share of writing whether its here or not. And, when you do post, it's like writing a bike, your skill is always there! Take care. [This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-25-2004 10:14 PM).] |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
yes for me too and lots of "editing" didn't really fix it either - ou write this so very very well - Paul |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Paul, I've lots of experience messing up! Thank you. I look forward to read more of your work, edited or not! Sadie passing shadow, Somehow I knew that. I enjoy the honesty in which you write. Sadie ethome, Thanks for stopping by and commenting. I bet as a song writer it's even tougher! I hope you're doing well with your CD goal. Sadie [This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-25-2004 11:35 PM).] |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
LOL How well I understand this!!! In fact... the archives contain several of my nothings... some of which are probably more meaningful now than when the poem was there! *G* |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
suthern, So you deleted them totally, but the blank remained in the archives? Interesting. I'm glad to find that many share this common thread! Thanks for your response. I appreciate it, suthern ~Sadie~ |
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