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Sadelite
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0 posted 2004-04-25 01:59 AM




Horizontally
Bic lay waiting to be held
  clutched by penning thoughts

© Copyright 2004 Sadelite - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-04-25 04:23 AM


good one
Sadelite
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2 posted 2004-04-25 04:36 AM


passing shadows,
   Thank you for your sweet response.
              Sadie

Margherita
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3 posted 2004-04-25 07:37 AM


What a cool write, Sadie!
It's good to establish a relationship with the BIC, it collaborates after all!
Enjoyed this much.
Love, Margherita

dingusjr
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4 posted 2004-04-25 07:41 AM


What about Zebra?   Clever write.
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2004-04-25 07:43 AM


Sadelite
Well done my friend.

ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2004-04-25 10:57 AM


GRIN!!!
TD

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7 posted 2004-04-25 11:07 AM



See?  Anything can turn into a poem!

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2004-04-25 11:16 AM



Starkly white and bare,
Paper awaits flow of ink
In poetic form.

Smiling here,
Linda

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9 posted 2004-04-25 11:32 AM


Sadie, I see nothing wrong with this write.
I think it's good.
  

iliana
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10 posted 2004-04-25 12:09 PM


good one!
VAS
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11 posted 2004-04-25 12:28 PM


hey, mighty fine!

when I saw the title, I wondered if it would be about the bic pen...amazing!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Sadelite
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12 posted 2004-04-25 04:06 PM


Margherita,
  Everytime I think I have no more interest in writing, I see the pen.  I wish I knew what it wanted to say.  Thank you for your
your response.  I always learn something.
             Sadie

dingusjr,
  
   Zebra? Never had
the pleasure of stripes
swinging into tale.

(Gee, that was fun!) Thanks for the clever.

            ~ Sadie ~


Seymour,
  That means alot coming from a poet whose attitude and skills I so admire.
              ~Sadie~

TD,
  Grinnin' right back at ya!  Thanks for taking the time to read.  You're a sweetheart.
              ~Sadie~

Sunshine,
  I have always believed this, but would rather have a little more content than this,although this
does suit the mood now. Thanks for stopping in.
                ~Sadie~

Earth Angel,
   "Starkly white and bare,
   Paper awaits flow of ink
   In poetic form."
    
I enjoyed your senryu, and am sending one back.  Thank you.  Linda, I really enjoy our friendship here.

   Fingers wait occasion
   to ignite the stick between
   when mind is fired.

                 ~Sadie~

Gary's girl,
  
  (Before I edited several times, it was written in a very provocative manner, something which I try to avoid.  Sexual connotations accidently were there.
I feel very uncomfortable sharing thoughts of that nature. I doctored the poem up, but still remember it the other way.  It's certainly not my favorite senryu!  Thanks for your comforting comment, Ethel.
           Sadie
  
iliana,
   Thank you.  I'll catch you later...
         Love, Lil Sis

VAS,
   "Very fine."  I like the fine tipped pen, too!
Thank you for your sweet comment.
             Sadie

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (04-25-2004 10:23 PM).]

Goodknight
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13 posted 2004-04-25 08:48 PM


great great great and my pen is still working - thjis is wonderful Sadie - I really liked it - Paul
Sadelite
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14 posted 2004-04-25 10:24 PM


Glad you liked it, Paul.  Thanks for checking it out...
           Sadie

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