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Krawdad
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0 posted 2004-04-24 03:48 PM



                    Soon to Die


                    Licking up
                    the last corner of a 1910,
                    red and yellow tongues
                    hunger for remaining bits of
                    cream paint.

                    black ash footprints
                    white foam drifts

                    There will be no
                    memories to rekindle here,
                    even of the trees,
                    boiled.
  


[This message has been edited by Krawdad (04-24-2004 08:03 PM).]

© Copyright 2004 Krawdad - All Rights Reserved
Aenimal
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1 posted 2004-04-24 04:47 PM


excellent as always,(cringing as i type the pun but typing it nonetheless) consumed by your words..
Grover
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London, ON, Canada
2 posted 2004-04-24 06:40 PM


A pleasure to read... jubilant images jumped out and grabbed me.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
3 posted 2004-04-24 06:52 PM


Fantastic write as always Kraw'.
I very much enjoy reading your work.
*Love the new pic!*
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Krawdad
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4 posted 2004-04-24 07:01 PM


happened by a house fire this afternoon . . . nearly totally consumed . . . only one bit of a corner remained
Margherita
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Eternity
5 posted 2004-04-24 07:17 PM


Thank you for the explanation.
I was captured by your write, but wondered ..
A powerful rendering of what you witnessed.
Love, Margherita

azblond
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The Steamy Desert
6 posted 2004-04-24 07:20 PM


I must admit...at first I was a bit confused...but now...the image is "roaring" and I love the description of the trees...so unique and right on target.  

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

Krawdad
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7 posted 2004-04-24 08:06 PM


A little obsure?  I added the middle verse.  
passing shadows
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displaced
8 posted 2004-04-25 02:07 PM


love the new pic

the thoughts in this short piece are ones that will stay with me

Midnitesun
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Gaia
9 posted 2004-04-25 05:29 PM


All those burnt physical memories....
good searing imagery, Mister Krawdad.  

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
10 posted 2004-04-25 06:05 PM


What came to me were thoughts from
Farenheit 451, and the loss of books...

thank you, Sir.

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07
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Netherlands
11 posted 2004-04-25 06:58 PM


Hi Krawdad, must say I love your description of a burnt down house, despite the sadness of the event.

And I love your new photo too.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

iliana
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12 posted 2004-04-26 12:00 PM


After reading your explanation of the house fire I went back to read it again.  Artistry!  
serenity blaze
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13 posted 2004-04-26 12:34 PM


I read this and thought, "I can relate."

Then I read your explanation and blushed, thinking, "no wonder I can relate."



Thanks for the awesome poetry e.

Martie
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14 posted 2004-05-13 06:15 PM


Krawdad

When I read this I related it to the fires last year in our So Cal mountains...I wasn't too far off.  Well done...hope you are staying safe!  

Susan
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walking the surreal
15 posted 2004-05-13 08:35 PM


So few words so full of meaning.  Having watched my home burn to the ground in the wee hours of the morning, this poem speaks volumns.  My favorite trees gone too.  And I loved that 100 year old lilac bush!  Sooo very sad, that lovely lilac that lived for sooo very long.  I still miss it.

Susan

ecrivan
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my own state
16 posted 2004-05-13 11:05 PM


captured some austere images here...enjoyed!


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