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garysgirl
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0 posted 2004-04-24 03:39 PM


Shhhhhhhhhhhhh......
listen..........do you hear......

There it is again....
thump thump.....thump thump
louder, louder, louder

as you get nearer....nearer....nearer.....

Is it going to beat out of my chest.....

Now it's racing like crazy
in expectancy of your kiss
your touch, your voice.....

Oh, what you do to my heart!!!!



© Copyright 2004 Ethel GG Kent - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2004-04-24 05:04 PM


Tremendous tempo and excellent pitch!
TD

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2 posted 2004-04-24 06:03 PM


STI-EL-EN!
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3 posted 2004-04-24 06:05 PM


Awh...how sweet!

Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind...

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4 posted 2004-04-24 06:08 PM


beautiful!

~~**~~
The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you
~~**~~

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5 posted 2004-04-24 08:00 PM


this gets a rhythm going andyou say so well what you feel - loved it Paul
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6 posted 2004-04-24 08:04 PM


oh the things they can do, can't they?
jwesley
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7 posted 2004-04-24 08:12 PM


really cute my friend...know the feeling well...jwesley

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8 posted 2004-04-24 08:17 PM



*SMILING*

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9 posted 2004-04-24 08:47 PM


Love it!!!

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
   is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

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10 posted 2004-04-24 08:55 PM


I've always been skeptical of using HTML tags in one's poetry, but to be entirely honest, I think you may have very well shown me the way that they can be appropriate.

They lifted the tone of your poem to a delightful feather-weight, and it tickled me quite a bit.  If you write with your heart, then your heart must be very special---

Take care,
Brian

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11 posted 2004-04-24 09:02 PM


garysgirl - I heard it, I did, I did...

BC

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12 posted 2004-04-25 12:08 PM


Great one, Ethel!  You had mine racing...
              Sadelite

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13 posted 2004-04-25 03:42 AM


Thank ya'll for reading and replying to this
little thing. It was fun writing it. I
enjoyed your comments.
Hugs  
Ethel

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14 posted 2004-04-25 04:39 AM


should we call the cardiologist just to be on the safe side?
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15 posted 2004-04-25 06:03 AM


Ha! What a great angle. I like it very much!


Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

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16 posted 2004-04-25 08:15 AM



...and what a pretty face...

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17 posted 2004-04-25 08:36 AM


Ahh when the heart plays drum and can be HEARD!
And what an immense pleasure to share!
Very lovely, as are you!
Love and hugs. Margherita

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18 posted 2004-04-25 08:44 AM


Well bless your sweet soul, Ethel Mae! Yes! I definitely know where you are coming from with this right write! lol
Heart Beat

Linda Lou

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20 posted 2004-04-26 12:58 PM


beautiful poem to match a pretty woman...lovely write, and love the pic of you....have a great day
iliana
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21 posted 2004-04-26 01:01 PM


Ethel -- this is great!  
jwesley
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22 posted 2004-04-26 09:33 PM


Had to come back in here because of the title...once wrote something very different from yours, for the daughter of a friend which used "Shhhhhh" extensively...gonna subject you to it ... HA!


Idle Talk

Creeping, crawling, through the grass,
…shhhhh,
should I ask, “May I pass?”
…welllll
it is polite, but before you ring,
…shhhhh,
I ask again, “What’s that thing?”

It has eight legs,
and great big eyes,
a soft round body,
with fur on the sides.

Maybe it can hear us talking,
…shhhhh,
maybe we would just keep walking,
…hmmmmm,
if we did, what would it do,
…shhhhh,
maybe it bites, and turns you blue!

It runs around
with uncanny grace,
and it can move,
at such a fast pace.

Maybe we should leave it alone,
…shhhhh,
maybe we should go back home,
…welllll,
still I wonder if it would,
…shhhhh,
let’s just go, and leave it for good.

Gee, now we’ll never know,
if it would have let us go,
but if it did, maybe then,
it would have asked to be our friend!

jwesley

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23 posted 2004-04-26 10:59 PM


Thanks Lee, iliana, and Jimmy.....

and Jimmy?  I love that poem...you should post it so
everybody can see it. It's really cute.
Hugs to you all,
ethel

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24 posted 2004-04-26 11:06 PM


sweet
Snowflake From Hell
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25 posted 2004-04-27 09:25 AM


much enjoyed

Can you hear my cries, can you hear my pleads, will you watch me burn...or would you bleed for me?

LeeJ
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26 posted 2004-04-27 09:27 AM


very lovely!
Susan Caldwell
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27 posted 2004-04-27 12:37 PM




Very sweet, just like you.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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28 posted 2004-04-27 12:43 PM


The pitty pat of the heart waiting for a big ole kiss. Good one...
Like Jwesley one too. Cute. What kind of bug is it. All those legs and fuzzy. Yuck. LOL
See Ya
Bon-Bon

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