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PKreturns
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0 posted 2004-04-23 09:29 AM


The wind angrily recalls your absence
Your fall from my physical presence
Biting in its cold, cruel finality
Darkness overcomes all with certainty
Damage I have done by all accounts
Beyond repair now, the torture mounts
Torn between choices of anguish and despair
Others come and go as they live unaware
To the cold wind which surrounds me
Like a living thing breathing down on me
And I am just about ready to give in
And then tears shall drown the wind


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1 posted 2004-04-23 09:36 AM


A very good, melancholic write, PK...
it is so good to see you here, again,
in the blue pages.

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2004-04-23 10:00 AM


To be in such a state of ambivilence, where choices seem to scant the edge in all directions, is anguish...even silence cannot abate.  Yet thy shield would be gold in an ebony night.
TD

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3 posted 2004-04-23 11:28 AM


I know that moment
LeeJ
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4 posted 2004-04-23 01:00 PM


heartfelt and bittersweet...such descriptive lines, each and everyone of them!


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5 posted 2004-04-23 01:36 PM


quote:
Torn between choices of anguish and despair

a very rough space
but a very good write

Grover
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6 posted 2004-04-23 04:13 PM


Truly, a very good write with real substance.
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7 posted 2004-04-23 09:25 PM


PK~
This one called my name and bid me come in for a read~
A compelling read it was ... I've known both the tears and the drowned wind~
Thank you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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8 posted 2004-04-23 09:32 PM


The rhyming seemed fresh and original. Cool.
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