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Saddened Head.
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Saddened Head. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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heavy eyelids...... I crouch under the hot water and I cry. I do not want this.. A heavy weight of me. Army telepathy, shots are fired there are casualties, birds scatter in all directions of my head and I watch them forget me.. just like you did. I remember sitting at the park for hours.. watching steam rise from the streets, eyeing grass as it grew, I could see.. Finally, that I am too tired to sleep. Maybe, this is a good time to speak to you, about my heart and how it's weak. I do not want this.. your voice on the other line, needing me.. just.. telling myself to breathe. Holding my head in my hands I reflect all too much, I wish I weren't a mirror, or streaked with fingerprints. My hair is wet, this is no rain.. It's time for me to return to my head again.. the doves are black, writhing in tar and I have no room to save them in this heap of corpses..all my own. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
birds scatter in all directions of my head and I watch them forget me.. ~*~ The shooshing sounds woke me... Well done, Meghan |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Holding my head in my hands I reflect all too much, I wish I weren't a mirror, or streaked with fingerprints. You are soooo way far beyond my friend....and you know it, but I needed to reinstate that regardless....anyway, you are a tremendous writer, love to read you...wishing you a great day and wonderful weekend ahead! Love Lee J. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I do understand.... there are brighter days...that's what they tell me |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"It's time for me to return to my head again.." My head is my danger area...  Only you could write this so well.."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
another one only you could write, and make it feel real |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i watch them forget me and the bird flies your words are emphatic as they release you |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kaoru - You are one good writer for sure, not only did I read this, I felt it also... BC |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
on the other side is solitude... when you write like you do you are never alone -- you take us all there. |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
Wow... Let my words fall first upon deaf ears before a closed mind... |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"I wish I weren't a mirror, or streaked with fingerprints." ...but then you would be a different poet. It is a hard thing that the painful emotions often drive us to see furthest into human understanding and to reflect it with enhanced clarity into others' eyes. You have done well with this; I wish it did not have to hurt so much. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Maybe it's lazy to say 'what he said' but icebox said it best. |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A most excellent poem. Thanks for sharing! |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
the sun will return to you dear  nice write kelly |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Soooo sad and so deeply emotional. Kaoru, this is one of your very best and it's going to be a permanent in my library.  |
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