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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2004-04-22 07:01 PM

I slept not

I slept not...

and sailed close to the wind
in three different directions
circulating around cliff edges
leaning into far-away mountains
with Kayahne on my mind

there’s a bridge and thirteen
reasons why I should get over it
but the gods play havoc
crying without sound
tossing me
into tiny cobbled corners
and red street lamps

my cheek-bones ache with
the curve of quiet
palmed to these fingers
arthritic bound

I slept not...

for a soft breath
set me a carousel to travel south
over the soft of my belly.

230404

What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (04-23-2004 03:09 AM).]

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2004-04-22 07:15 PM

"there’s a bridge and thirteen
reasons why I should get over it
but the gods play havoc
crying without sound
tossing me
into tiny cobbled corners
and red street lamps"

If I told you how much I like that verse, it would sound like I was gushing, so trust me on it, ok??

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2004-04-22 07:39 PM

my cheek-bones ache with
the curve of quiet palmed
to these fingers
arthritic bound

love your writing ...

M

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2004-04-22 08:14 PM

my cheek-bones ache with
the curve of quiet palmed
to these fingers
arthritic bound

I slept not...

for a soft breath
set me a carousel to travel south
over the soft of my belly.
=============================

Now who could sleep with aching cheeks and southern breezes cross ones belly???

what a very very cool write Maree...
a superb dreamscape of abstract, surreal, haunting and striking imagery and personification. Dont sleep....WRITE MORE.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2004-04-22 08:25 PM

Oh Maree....how wonderful is this??!!! VERY!
Gawd I love your imagery!
Hugs~

To have lived the dream of a love so true...
is to have seen a glimpse of heaven.

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

5 posted 2004-04-22 08:57 PM

for a soft breath
set me a carousel to travel south
over the soft of my belly''''

~

Maree

this is ever lovely....such imagery too...

~~**~~
The sound of silence calls,
I hear your voice and suddenly
I'm falling, lost in a dream
The echo of our souls meet
~~**~~

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2004-04-22 10:52 PM

This is one of the most full lipped, breathlessly written pieces on these pages.
TD

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

7 posted 2004-04-22 11:38 PM

Find yourself a new muse, did ya?

Or are you just whipping the old one?

Very nicely done Darksis

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-04-23 01:53 AM

I love this! awesome!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2004-04-23 06:57 AM

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2004-04-23 11:51 AM

Maree, what a fascinating write this is, leaving one with a sense of wonder, really -- there's this message of anxiety underneath a soft scent of jasmine.

....jo

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

11 posted 2004-04-23 12:59 PM

Very interresting. Thank you....

INclan

PKreturns
Member

since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

12 posted 2004-04-23 02:31 PM

VERY striking images you write and invoke.

I like this style of yours even though its not my usual favorite style.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

13 posted 2004-04-23 05:48 PM

nice read

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

14 posted 2004-04-23 07:24 PM

You are not only Luscious, but STUNNING.

This is salty sultry trade wind sensuality, lovely one.

I'm keeping it.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

15 posted 2004-04-23 07:57 PM

Enjoyed...impressive...James

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

16 posted 2004-04-23 10:51 PM

Sleep, what is the meaning of this strange word?

I slept not...

for a soft breath
set me a carousel to travel south
over the soft of my belly

l2ved this..hugs

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

17 posted 2004-04-24 06:10 PM

Thank you all

Maree.

What are you my god? You touch me like you are my god
What are you my twin? You affect me like you are my twin.

Go Alanis!

Goodknight
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 2386
Ohio, USA

18 posted 2004-04-24 08:20 PM

your images are marvelous and your writing is wonderful - Paul

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

19 posted 2004-05-02 10:24 AM

Maree

You move me with this honest, sensually pleasing poem. So well done!

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

20 posted 2004-05-02 01:08 PM

Dear Maree, you slept not and created this gift for us to enjoy.
Beautiful imagery!
Love, Margherita

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

21 posted 2004-05-05 04:13 PM

...

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

22 posted 2004-05-05 04:19 PM

Catacombs, m'dear...

PKreturns
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since 2003-07-21

Posts 362
New Orleans, LA

23 posted 2004-05-05 04:39 PM

I slept not...

for a soft breath
set me a carousel to travel south
over the soft of my belly.

Oh, I loved this.

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

24 posted 2004-05-05 05:12 PM

I never sleep...(probably all the drugs)....but, if you want to see your
"dreams" come true...don't sleep...nice write gal...

Elan
Member

since 2002-05-03

Posts 382
State of Wide Eye

25 posted 2004-05-05 07:19 PM

Some one day you must
name the reasons

it would be
another poem.

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

26 posted 2004-05-05 08:19 PM

now, how in the world did i miss this??

i agree completely with what janetmarie said!!

turns out a bit lusty at the end

as always, you knock our socks off

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

27 posted 2004-05-05 08:28 PM

Your words are so so beautiful.
*Allison*

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

28 posted 2004-05-06 07:44 AM

Maree,

I muchly enjoyed this one...

Regards
Sudhir

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