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Disjointed Lines
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
He wrote to her of himself in lines on a page Freed all his emotions from their gilded cage Took to the air like birds on the wing Looking for a place to nest in every little thing She reads the words of her beauty, classic and fair Fingers brush through her soft and feathery hair A smile that speaks of beseeching wings of the dove And soft calls on a day that brings a hint of love The words cannot explain all there is to know Of how much he lives to see her glow All he can offer are symbols and signs But it all comes out as so many disjointed lines |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
to me, it came out just perfect...love doesn't judge...and I bet, she feels the very same way |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
The words cannot explain all there is to know Of how much he lives to see her glow All he can offer are symbols and signs But it all comes out as so many disjointed lines ~*~ Sir, your lines appear to be justified, at least, to me. So glad to see you come home, again... it's about time! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey you... I always feel awkward and fumbled when attempting to express the voice of the soul too... As much as I love the English language, when it comes to love and loving, I find it pretty much inadequate, m'self. I think you did a pretty good job of expressing that frustration here. Welcome back, Jer.  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Terrific! TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write...well done! Hugs~ To have lived the dream of a love so true... |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Yes, terrific! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"The words cannot explain all there is to know Of how much he lives to see her glow All he can offer are symbols and signs But it all comes out as so many disjointed lines" this just flows... and this part here...has such impact  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
Thank you all for reading! Good to be back. |
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