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gemjop
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0 posted 2004-04-21 09:30 AM


As we recall forgotten details
she is captured by all we forget
throughout our ordinary days
our ordinary lives

there is more than this

heat upon her skull tells her so
hairs that rise from bowed submission
like a crowd rising from their seats

someone else is getting through

I remember my fear
watching her suffer flashbacks not of her own
I remember my dreams
of fire and fatalities

and I wonder why they chose us

mother and child
sharing every instance of life
but this

and fear silenced me
I admit


The black rage of unknown
could close my eyes
in an instant

misunderstanding the intent

And i'll always wonder if
that Christmas we peiced together their message
after all those years

they put out their fires
and lay to rest

.



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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2004-04-21 09:34 AM


gemjop
Good write, enjoyed the read.

Dark Angel
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2 posted 2004-04-21 09:37 AM


heat upon her skull tells her so
hairs that rise from bowed submission
like a crowd rising from their seats


oooh shivers...

hairs that rise from bowed submission
like a crowd rising from their seats


Wow, love that line.
Great one Gem

Have you any dreams you'd like to sell?

Stevie Nicks

gemjop
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3 posted 2004-04-21 12:07 PM


Thanks seymour, glad you liked.

Maree, thanks for always taking the time to read me.

passing shadows
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4 posted 2004-04-21 12:47 PM


this is haunting...but nice ending
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5 posted 2004-04-21 12:53 PM


OOOOOHHHHH, this one is shivery, but very good
writing, LittleFriend. Good to see, you, Gemma.
Hugs,
Ethel

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6 posted 2004-04-21 04:24 PM


Lots of imagery here, Gemma...
I picked up the same lines as Maree...
but then, I would!

JL
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7 posted 2004-04-21 04:50 PM


Very nice write!
JL

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