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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2004-04-19 07:09 PM


Things have never felt this real,
this harsh – dreams for sale.
I'm done,
I'm tired
I can't do this anymore.
You can have all of me,
everything . . .
I don't need it anymore.

Was it all meant for her?
Was everything you said,
everything you did . . .
was it all meant for her?

Your eyes
could bore a hole through what’s left of my heart.
I think they already have.
My feelings are pouring out,
spilling onto the floor
but you’re . . .  turned away,
turned . . . away.

Dreams for Sale.

(revised by jwesley,whoa hoo you rock! lol)





[This message has been edited by exhale (04-20-2004 07:35 PM).]

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Grover
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since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967
London, ON, Canada
1 posted 2004-04-19 07:15 PM


Powerful, sincere words. An excellent write.
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
2 posted 2004-04-19 09:35 PM


well and truly from the heart, my friend...

jwesley

Censored
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since 2004-04-11
Posts 86

3 posted 2004-04-19 10:45 PM


Powerful. I can relate to your poem. Good Write
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
4 posted 2004-04-20 03:26 AM


oh my...this aches deep
exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada
5 posted 2004-04-20 07:36 PM


This is the revised version of this poem by jwesley,thanks a million D
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
6 posted 2004-04-20 10:51 PM


...thanks for the thought but no credit needed for revision help, my friend, especially not as little as I gave... this write is all YOU, not me.

jimmy


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